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    dots Submission Name: Break Expectationsdots
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    Author: dado
    ASL Info:    22/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 25/29/9
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 255
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 719



    Description:
       Looking for any comments, how you felt, writing techniques etc.

    PLEASE READ MY OTHER WORK AND REVIEW I HAVE TO SUBMIT SOME POETRY SOON AND NEED TO CHOOSE 2 PIECES TO GO FORWARD!


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    dotsBreak Expectationsdots
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    Who is it that leads our lives
    Those in front or those behind
    Or is it that this push and pull
    Stops us living free at all

    To becomes ourselves must we try
    To find our path wthout a guide
    Others truths may not be true
    And often govern one not two

    Do expectations give us goals
    Or keep us firm within a mould
    Dont these casts lay down for us
    Show lack of faith and lack of trust

    Can we break free of these chains
    Without causing loved ones pain
    Cant there be a compromise
    Make my own choices, make them wise

    We only get one shot at life
    Dont use me to make yours right




    Submitted on 2004-09-15 18:52:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      that is a great ending line, i thought you where going with useing the title in it. but you didn;t and it was rad. is this just for your book or is it a performance piece? if it's just for you book i'd take out the stanza's and just have it be one big hunk. it's kind of muddled and i think that would add to it a bit, it's good to be kinda fuzzy.

    milo stills
    | Posted on 2004-09-15 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]



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