Your hair is so black
it's as though the coal
your Welsh grandfather mined
stained your genes.
Your owl-wise eyes are the peculiar brown
of sepiatone photographs.
Your smooth skin turns the color
of rich Italian soil
beneath the July sun,
and your beautiful mouth
speaks old-soul earthy truths
that would shame an old Blues singer
and bring Woody Guthrie to tears.
wow that was really cool you said so much in so few stanzas painted an amazing picture with out defintion i dont really know exactly who this person is or what they look like but i do know that they are fantastic and to me a hippish earth mother hottie haha amazing word choices
your work is always full of such strong images. this one really stands out for me. man, this is full of great imagery.
i actually really liked the last line. i thought it was the perfect end.
now, the one thing I would say is that although I am assuming you are writing about someone of your age (taht you are involved with), it does make me feel a bit like you are talking about an older man (like your grandfather).
Okay, okay, I'm a guy. Forgive me. I saw the title, clicked, then saw the hot dress. When i finished reading it, it wasn't quite what i expected but, well, it was good I'm not very familiar with Woodie Guthrie but i might look into him later on. It was a nice read. Aken Sol
ooohhh...cuddles i liked this its a great image of a hottie...lol..i liked your descriptions ..specially the one about his skin...i would of been fine with out the very last line...but its good either way...nope no complaints really...and the title made me want to read it...haha...smiles ange
:) So they would bring Woodie Guthrie to tears? Haha. Hmmm... got a little hot here... This is a little step on to the side of perversion, I don't like this word, cause it's taken as a 100% negative one... but come on - it's what people are thinking all the time. And the idea of
"It's as though the coal Your Welsh grandfather mined Stained your genes"
is so... mrrrrr.... (purring) :P
Really good, but I believe you could step even a bit further if you know what I mean. :D