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    dots Submission Name: Earthydots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 732
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       I once titled this Earthy (Hot, Kinky Sex) as a joke (just so the messages below make sense).

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    Your hair is so black
    it's as though the coal
    your Welsh grandfather mined
    stained your genes.
    Your owl-wise eyes are the peculiar brown
    of sepiatone photographs.
    Your smooth skin turns the color
    of rich Italian soil
    beneath the July sun,
    and your beautiful mouth
    speaks old-soul earthy truths
    that would shame an old Blues singer
    and bring Woody Guthrie to tears.

    Submitted on 2004-09-16 04:59:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    that was really cool
    you said so much
    in so few stanzas
    painted an amazing picture with out defintion
    i dont really know exactly who this person is or what they look like
    but i do know that they are fantastic and to me a hippish earth mother hottie
    haha amazing word choices
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by scorpio sphinx | [ Reply to This ]
      your work is always full of such strong images. this one really stands out for me. man, this is full of great imagery.

    i actually really liked the last line. i thought it was the perfect end.

    now, the one thing I would say is that although I am assuming you are writing about someone of your age (taht you are involved with), it does make me feel a bit like you are talking about an older man (like your grandfather).
    | Posted on 2004-09-17 00:00:00 | by jdinning67 | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, okay, I'm a guy. Forgive me. I saw the title, clicked, then saw the hot dress. When i finished reading it, it wasn't quite what i expected but, well, it was good
    I'm not very familiar with Woodie Guthrie but i might look into him later on. It was a nice read.
    Aken Sol
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by Aken Sol | [ Reply to This ]
      Wowzas, love the dress! (In the new photo that is.) As a folk music enthusiast, your Woody reference rocked my socks off. Beautifully put together.
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      ooohhh...cuddles i liked this its a great image of a hottie...lol..i liked your descriptions ..specially the one about his skin...i would of been fine with out the very last line...but its good either way...nope no complaints really...and the title made me want to read it...haha...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      well, 'South Carolina mud/ Beneath the July sun' doesn't sound so seductive (at least for me) but anyway this is a really good piece. my favourite part were the lines

    "Your hair is so black
    It's as though the coal
    Your Welsh grandfather mined
    Stained your genes"

    great lines. I don't know who Woody Guthrie is, forgive me I'm not so into American Blues. but I like your poem and the title was nice. you surely get a lot of attention with such a title.
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      :) So they would bring Woodie Guthrie to tears? Haha. Hmmm... got a little hot here... This is a little step on to the side of perversion, I don't like this word, cause it's taken as a 100% negative one... but come on - it's what people are thinking all the time. And the idea of

    "It's as though the coal
    Your Welsh grandfather mined
    Stained your genes"

    is so... mrrrrr.... (purring) :P

    Really good, but I believe you could step even a bit further if you know what I mean. :D
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting poem, really like the imagery, especailly with the coal. i would drop one or two of the 'and's [just me 2 cents-take it or leave it]. :-)
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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