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    dots Submission Name: Self-Guidancedots

    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622/961/454
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Faith inside of this world is all I need to get through these times that come down upon me

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    Things not done, places forgotten to go,
    Friends make it hard; worlds coming down on me
    Depression comes in and it blinds what we know,
    Things come down to grant us more agoney...

    Fustrations arise, things lost, things not done,
    Thoughts lost in the space of misery,
    And all of these things make our spirits run,
    To a place that is our sanctuary...

    Our heart unconsiousely guides to saftey,
    The tide of misery, must leave our blood,
    And all is to find that one place away from misery
    And we embrace our hurt with our love...

    Time after time, pain comes back again,
    But with that one person it goes away,
    And it creates a goal within our self to look in,
    And that is to live with that person every day...

    That one goal inside of your self you see,
    That one place that takes you away from pain,
    That one place in life that your again happy,
    That one place that is calling our hearts name,
    Follow it,
    Embrace it,
    Take it,
    Whatever you do don't give into that darkness.

    Submitted on 2004-09-16 09:18:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! man...WOW! this poem is an instant favorite bro...The message of this poem is so impressively beautiful and absolutley what i'm all about...One must look past the shadow of the bad, for that's all it is, a shadow to blind us from what really matters, the joy in life...If you don't mind i'd like to share one of my poems with you that paint a similar picture to that of yours...

    The spirit of man let it be
    That the truth within will set us free
    It is we that choose all we are
    We can lie in wait or touch a star

    The physical eye is not the same
    As the spiritual eye that holds the flame
    To see the all in everything
    In the words we speak and the love we bring

    The power we hold is forgotten in age
    When we lose ourselves to the war they wage
    We are all and one when we find our truth
    We are absolute in indomitable youth

    To grow and forget seems the way
    When we push a button to greet the day
    In this technical world we loosen our grip
    We accept their answer while we let us slip

    If we forget our child then we lose our path
    But if we lose control we fear the wrath
    If you hold onto the self thatís true
    The world is open and itís ruled by you

    ...so i'll continue on as though i didn't even send it cause i don't blame ya if you didn't read it...Anyway man, i'm jealous your talent surpasses mine...lol...I bow to you...wonderful job...Thanks for this poem and i hope to hear from you...Take care...Adios! Travis
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]

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