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    dots Submission Name: The Beautydots
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    Author: Eah
    ASL Info:    20/F/KY
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 74/81/22
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 237
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I need help with one... it seems kind of scattered, and I just need some input!


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    dotsThe Beautydots
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    Do you see me?
    Can you look into my eyes
    and say you've seen true beauty?
    My life is only a second long,
    and there is so much beauty around me.
    It overwhelms my souls,
    to the point that I can no longer breathe.
    I want to make a difference,
    and I want to go unnoticed.
    I want to be myself,
    and I want you to see me for who I really am.
    It seems the more I live,
    the longer I have to be alive.
    That seems logical.
    But I think that
    you don't really have to be alive for long
    to live alot.
    I want to be simple,
    and I want to be true.
    And until things are simple,
    until they're true,
    there's nothing that I can do.
    I can accomplish nothing,
    I'm forced to be a prisoner of my own eyes.
    I'll watch all the beauty,
    until it too passes me by,
    but one day,
    the only thing that will matter
    is simplicity and honesty.
    Then I will become beautiful.
    I will have my chance to be what I am,
    and you'll be able to see.
    You'll be able to look into my eyes
    and know you've see true beauty.
    You will see me.




    Submitted on 2004-09-16 09:45:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's a very beautiful piece - it expresses what I myself believe about life's simple truths, and what beauty is and the misconceptions about it...lovely.
    | Posted on 2004-09-25 00:00:00 | by Color_the_Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      scatterd or not my friend this poem has a beautifuly inspiring thought behind it...I love the strength that you show in this one...you truely are a beautiful person... I find myself not being able to get rid of the smile on my face after reading this... my cheeks are starting to hurt...make it stop! anyway...enough of the insanity...It's truely an honor my friend to be able to read your heart...I'm not one to pay attention to the flow or the rhyme of a piece nor the word usage...I look for the emotion one puts forth to make their work a masterpiece, and you my friend, have done this beautifuly...congradulations, you've touched me... If you don't mind i'll make this a favorite and leave it at that...Bravo! thanks again my friend and i hope to hear from you...Adios! Travis
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked a lot of this piece also I got a little lost too. But I loved the line'I'm forced to be a prisoner of my own eyes' That's really a sensitive insight into the humane condition.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]



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