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Flesh Awaiting Dissaray

Author: Damien Vladimir
ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122 /89 /35
Words: 136
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Flesh Awaiting Dissaray

How about a cloudless sky?
Would you like a flawless diamond?
How could i, not see you die without a crystal eye?
Death or life,which of both would you confide in?

You claim to be a coffin laying corpse,
a laughing lifeless soul to undergo and live as crow.
The peace i see, is dangerously doomsday,
as you reclaim will be a day, you free your spirit from the grave.

This is impossible!
Another superstitous mental puzzle,
an illusional idea of your bedazzled,
How could such a morbid thought not be a hassle?
but rather have you feeling like a knight inside a castle,
lost and waiting for your slaying.
waiting,watching over every city,
out for pity, out for feeding,only weak ones are the prey.
Have you negleted your decaying flesh?

Submitted on 2004-09-16 13:22:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Sorry i can't bash it! it is tooo good. i love it.
Exellent peice! it is dark and i thought it was kinda sexy too... but that is just me.
Take care.
| Posted on 2004-10-04 00:00:00 | by Jesimine | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the way that you broke up the three stanzas with in the poem. The first starting off a little more cheery than the last one for sure. Are you trying to get across the feeling of frustration? Cuase that's what I got from it, just my interpretation.
| Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by Jonathan Lennox | [ Reply to This ]

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