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    dots Submission Name: Lasting Foreverdots
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    Author: Eah
    ASL Info:    20/F/KY
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 74/81/22
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 307
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1748



    Description:
       This to is better on paper than on the net... it is a very visual poem, and YES "motheranddaughter" is supposed to be ONE Word! This is very personal, and I like it very much. I can edit it, but I would do so very hesitantly... :) Give me your thoughts anyways... just remember... it's visual, and this copy doesn't do it justice!


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    dotsLasting Foreverdots
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    Lasting Forever

    Setting in a room
    by myself.
    The walls washed in white.
    A single pearly
    tear
    rolls down my skin.

    My eyes closed tight as
    I envision my one
    perfect moment

    The warm fragrance
    of the field
    blows in the breeze
    yellow, pink, blue, and purple
    petals
    towards the Northern expanse.

    As the sun
    began
    to dip
    beneath
    the
    horizon,
    and the wind seemed
    to acquire the colors of the field,
    my glance moves up
    as I realized
    I am no longer
    alone.

    The eyes of those
    which my own sprang forth from
    set across the field
    gleaming back toward me.

    Her pale skin
    flawless
    illuminated amazingly
    in the dim sunlight.
    S-L-O-W-L-Y,
    my hand
    reaches out to her.
    And She reaching towards me as well
    takes hold of my fragile hand.
    And in that moment
    that we set there,
    the-bond-that-holds
    motheranddaughter
    was created

    "IT WILL LAST FOREVER,
    OUR BOND
    WILL LAST FOREVER."

    The colors of the wind
    play around our bonded figures.

    the smell of the field fades...
    the sound of the wind fades...
    the sight of my mother fades...
    the feel of her embrace fades...

    I open my eyes
    and realize once again
    that she lives within me.
    And I hear her voice once again...

    "IT WILL LAST FOREVER,
    OUR BOND
    WILL LAST FOREVER."




    Submitted on 2004-09-16 22:56:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      knowing whats up i know how hard it is for you to post this. like the first piece i wrote about being molested was hard for me to share with ANYONE muchless put it out here (which i havnt yet). its a good piece. i like your emphasis and the way no stanza looks the same as the last. i think it lends an air of change and acceptance. great job eah. much love. PS KT
    | Posted on 2004-09-17 00:00:00 | by Printer Shock | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm completely astounded. . . aside from the spelling errors I wouldn't change a thing. Can I tell you again that I'm impressed? I don't getting the thing with the numbers 8220 and 8221. . . maybe there's some really deep meaning behind it and I'm too tired to comprehend. Great write!
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2004-09-16 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]



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