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    dots Submission Name: The Spectredots
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    Author: curiosityskitty
    ASL Info:    30/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 145/149/30
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 376
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 451



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    dotsThe Spectredots
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    A shadow moves across the floor
    A ghostly apparition
    Chills me to the very core
    With baleful recognition

    Is she the phantom of a broken mind
    Or thief of mortal souls
    No vestige does she leave behind
    Nor proof of spirits stole

    With eyes transfixed in deadly gaze
    Your soul she'll wish to reap
    A sinister game this wraith will play
    until at last you sleep




    Submitted on 2004-09-17 01:12:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cool. This is a really interesting piece. I think it flowed well, and the imagery is awesome. I really like this description of death. I really love the second stanza; it's quit beautiful, actually.
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    | Posted on 2004-09-17 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      this was dark. i like dark poetry, and therefor, i really liked this. that last line made the poem, cause thats all there is in the end, when you finally come to rest. great job, i enjoyed it, thank you
    | Posted on 2004-09-17 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm always amazed when people are able to rhyme without using the usual easily rhymable words (is rhymable even a word?)... and moreso when they are able to do it with eloquence.

    at first, when i skimmed it, i saw the usual melancholic angsty words, and i wasn't going to give it a chance. then i saw the word wraith, which is my most absolutely favourite word, and i went back, absorbed the images and loved the piece.

    well, favourite next to susurrus, anyways.
    | Posted on 2004-09-17 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]



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