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    dots Submission Name: God Blinkeddots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619/473/167
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       the whole railing against patriachs-thing which i get into every once in a while. it's about a poor cuckold who is raising a little girl which he believes is his daughter (but she's not). i read someplace (think it was in Time magazine) that approximately one in four children in America are being raised by men who believe that they fathered them, but are actually products of extramaritial affairs. i wanted to put "Social Commentary" instead of "Serious" for the mood, but, so it goes.


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    dotsGod Blinkeddots
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    we are not all of us
    daughters of men, sister
    how pacific Noah's blood
    a hybrid race did birth
    some throwbacks pure as Eve

    but, oh, the others
    have changeling eyes
    and witch's hair

    caught you napping, Old Man,
    (stupendous).

    a nymphette, bow in hand,
    crushing eggshells beneath her heel
    predatory-smiled,
    steps from such nests
    (the vine of grapes is her crown)

    don't look now, Old Man,
    she isn't yours.

    mother to daughter,
    that vintage flows
    each one distilled
    and more potent than the last.
    an intoxicating contagion...
    the DNA of gods

    mark her well, Old Man
    with the owl and the wolf.

    a tertiary satellite
    dancing like madness in her heart
    no mortal tongue
    she (we)
    no earthbound lot
    (no fairy wings either)
    no taboo
    in such creations
    there are no flaws

    in striving to control
    each wound you deal is self-inflicted

    it's not your fault, Old Man,
    God blinked.




    Submitted on 2004-09-17 15:41:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is grand, I see a trilogy with Oblique being the mate to this, and a third installment on the way I hope.
    Hope you are well and that your hair looks great when windblown, ya know.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-09-18 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good (as yours always are). That's an interesting statistic that I'd never think of turning into a poem. It's alos amazing social commentary. I too liked the description of the child.
    | Posted on 2004-09-18 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Rue,
    I loved your description of the little girl, I could see her walking on the beach, beautiful and innocent. As for the father, how much does DNA really matter in the scheme of things. some men are Fathers and some just father.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-09-17 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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