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    dots Submission Name: You're Not Brave Enoughdots
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    Author: Eah
    ASL Info:    20/F/KY
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 74/81/22
    Words: 313
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 257
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1817



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       This is... well, I think it will speak for itself. All my thoughts and feelings about the person in poem are laid out there for the world to see (even that person, if they so chose) I give up! I don't care what they think anymore!


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    dotsYou're Not Brave Enoughdots
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    How can you tell some one how to live their life,
    when you yourself aren't brave enough to take your own advice.

    You're not brave enough to understand that you're smart.
    You're not brave enough to know that you are beautiful.

    These are the things you want her to see,
    but you're blinded from them as well.

    You're not brave enough to know it doesn't matter what other people think.
    You're not brave enough to understand that High School was only four years of your life.

    I wish you could see,
    I tried to tell you all these things myself.

    You're not brave enough to know that you are in control of your life.
    You're not brave enough to see that you can change it.

    I know that you want to change your life,
    but you just can't find it inside of you to go through with it.

    You're not brave enough to know that you should do what makes you feel good about yourself.
    You're not brave enough to know that it's okay to like something just because you do.

    You always think there needs to be a reason,
    But sometimes you don't need to justify yourself.

    What will it take for you to become a whole person?
    And when you find that person,
    the one you like,
    what will it take to keep that feeling inside of you?

    You can say all you want to her,
    But she will become what you are,
    Unless you change the way you feel.

    She sees you,
    And sees herself.
    And that's not a very bright future.

    You're just not brave enough for this world.




    Submitted on 2004-09-17 21:49:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have some people who need to read this and take what it says to heart. Don't change a thing about it. I'm adding this to my favs.
    | Posted on 2004-09-18 00:00:00 | by Pogirl | [ Reply to This ]
      oist! your poem has a lot of emotions involved and the reader really felt it. But I think it would be better if you focus more on the emotion and less on the phrases. Meaning shorten up your stanzas and add more rhythm. As the others say, "the shorter, the better". Readers like to read poems because they want to decipher what's behind all the words and what it means. It will be less interesting if you're going to lay it all infront of them. Nonetheless, your piece is a thumbs up! Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-09-17 00:00:00 | by solitary_cross | [ Reply to This ]



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