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    dots Submission Name: Diagnosed:Insane of Lovedots

    Author: Damien Vladimir
    ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122/89/35
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsDiagnosed:Insane of Lovedots

    How can i be alive?
    don't even have the knowledge to explain how i've survived,
    always felt in existance
    but now i feel distanced
    for it's been a long sentence.
    Often i wonder,
    if you've seen the skies i've seen
    have you, little or no pity?
    You've killed my inner winner
    killed my soul, and made me sinner
    I haven't felt alive in so long,
    don't know even to this day if i should go along
    continue or retire,in the rain of grounds of fog
    still i can't win,by means of writing a great song

    A burn!
    there's nothing i can do to stop it,
    a cruel sensation, getting on my nerve
    i'm standing in a lava faucet,
    coals on coals, on coals, on coals
    stacked on up, and no one knows....The feeling!
    wishing my mind that i was dreaming.
    from all the pressure in my head,my ears are bleeding.

    Submitted on 2004-09-18 19:23:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You seem to be a little confused in life, and it really shows here. You seem to be going through the stage where you wonder the unanswerable questions and go mad because there are no logical answers. You seem to think there is a lack of meaning, life is a big pile of chaos, and I have to say I agree. I loved this piece because it was so all over the place! Sometimes poetry that is places in perfect structure absolutely stinks because it does not pertain to life. I thought this was excellent, and it striked me because it just seems so real, like something that would actually flow out of someone's brain. Good job... I know I'd weird.
    | Posted on 2004-09-18 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this...especially the title...im depressed today so i guess anything in this subject would appeal to me...but i still like this..
    | Posted on 2004-09-18 00:00:00 | by alma-perdida | [ Reply to This ]

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