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    dots Submission Name: Icy Winterdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I was reading a lot of Asian (not necessary haikus) when I wrote this. I see a lot of what I was reading in it.


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    dotsIcy Winterdots
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    The trees have been reduced to skeletons;
    the ice makes me slide.
    I hate not hearing the songs of birds,
    yet, the snow is as beautiful
    as the bloom of spring.





    Submitted on 2004-02-27 08:31:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good one Amy. Yes i can see the japanese influence even to your usually minimalist style.to me this is accomplished by describing winter in simple, succinct imagery, the "cutting" to the idea of spring...showing 2 disparate views,while linking them together. I too am weary of winter, and yesterday when i woke, the willow in my yard was truly heaped with soft globs of thick, fluffy, wet snow. In the early hours, i saw a Magnolia tree in full bloom, ..then went back to bed lol. Same idea. You poem, especially in light of that early morning experience, was a true "Haiku Moment" even though not truly a Haiku itself. Thanks, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-02-27 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the line
    "the trees have been reduced to skeletons"
    has a nice ring to it.
    good stuff.
    | Posted on 2004-02-27 00:00:00 | by die_another_day | [ Reply to This ]
      learning how to see beauty in everything... that's what the poem says to me... very nicely written...
    | Posted on 2004-02-27 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Expand on this-it's really good. I'd like to hear more. Can't wait til winter's over either.
    | Posted on 2004-02-27 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      another nice one.. full of emotion and imagery in so few words... shows an acceptance for things as they are, your ability to look on the bright side of things.... keep em coming nice piece
    | Posted on 2004-02-27 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]


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