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    dots Submission Name: Wide-Opendots
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    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 1148
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1707



    Description:
       A drunken response to 'What you been told?' comments. That poem was written in loneliness; this is written the same night having been summoned to not one but three parties (I went to 2). I'm not trying to brag, I'm trying to share. Try and understand.


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    The secrets that you hide
    Will be the reasons that you died,
    A slippery slope to climb or a slippery slope to slide -
    Imagine for a second that I believe what I say,
    Imagine that I think I speak to me when I pray.
    I help the weak up but if the strong feast on them,
    I move on with no guilt, from violence to peace again.
    And in your absolute systems you see me a living sin -
    But I just wish
    Ya'll could wish
    Ya'll could know.
    All you see is for show,
    The truth is far below perception
    I move quick in no direction,
    Choose nothing with my selection.
    The slow are gonna see a childish paradox,
    Just like the slow can't see themselves in children's blocks -
    Bitch please -
    I do have a mental disease,
    I disrespect you and direct you like your own vein that bleeds -
    We one and the same,
    Differ only in an idiots name,
    I drink like an alcoholic because I thirst for the pain.
    Bipolar since a kid but no excuse for what I did -
    Had times higher than a kite long before I found the mid.
    I get sought by the Egos because I'm at one with the Id -
    So they think I'm doing wrong,
    But is that being wrong?
    Forever I'll be strong,
    Struggle hard for my balance,
    The evil grows, the goodness shines, I rise to the challenge!
    Phalange -
    Piece of a part that does amazing things,
    I move with the impunity that being a part brings!
    I was a burning ember long before I was smoking,
    A book written without words,
    Nonetheless - Wide-Open




    Submitted on 2004-09-19 03:21:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This write really was wide-open. I don't really know how to comment on something with so much depth about a person. This tells so many things, wishing like you said, that the reader could understand. I can wish I could rhyme the way you do. I can't rhyme to save my soul! But this was beautifully written. You are who you are because of your past, but don't let it dictate who you will become. Good job.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...that was great...I enjoyed reading the poem much... the flow was on going and great...its a very unique poem and gives lots of everyday life.
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by Raksha | [ Reply to This ]


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