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    dots Submission Name: The Storytellersdots
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    Author: Leila
    ASL Info:    19/female/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 98/85/18
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 363
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Nothing in particular. Just say your say, and don't worry about offending me. Thanks.


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    dotsThe Storytellersdots
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    Like words they hit the dry earth,
    telling mysterious stories of us.
    Words of truth, torpedo's through the chilled sky,
    speak of hurt, suffering and pain,
    happiness, love and rejoice.

    Like God's vibrant messengers,
    they patter sentences and pour chapters.
    Only raindrops can see our lives
    through our satined, concealed windows
    and tell what is most enigmatic.
    Truth.

    And for that, they are fled from,
    avoided at all chance,
    like a diseased, haunting plague,
    so that we may escape their story.

    Yet, they are everywhere,
    smothering us in numbers,
    holding us as their prisoners.
    Barring us in their drops of revelation,
    their merciless story is force-fed.

    There is no foreseeable end to it.
    The beginning is vague and forgotten.
    But until the raindrops end their prose,
    until the sky hits the ground
    and we are drenched in complete truth,
    we will watch the raindrops tell our stories,
    of hurt suffering and pain,
    happiness, love and rejoice.




    Submitted on 2004-09-19 08:05:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      All in all a good pome. I am curious as to were it really hits home. How good is the food when we are forced fed. Perhapes we have just all in all lost our appetite instead. When we get burned it hurts we tend to dread all what we thought was the ans. but now we face dead. How can it happen like this? We tend to tremble with anger for we feel ripped off by the one who can cange things. You did good on the piece most elequantly. I cannot blame you for i don't like to waste my time either and sometimes when talking to others sometimes I need a breather . The worse is when those who speak as if they know cannot ans the simple question why do we suffer woe Sincerly Gannondalf aka Big Bear
    | Posted on 2006-04-14 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]
      I really loved reading this. You wrote so moving and beutiful. I'm adding this to my favs. You have a real talent for painting pictures with words never loose sight of that.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by Pogirl | [ Reply to This ]
      the feel of this is so beautiful. And I love the imagery. I know this is a "non-original" comment, but I'm hoping that you know what I mean.
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by DewdropMartini | [ Reply to This ]
      My friend i'm a stupid kid, a child that's looking for answers...This poem is so beautiful but it doesn't touch me as deep as i know it could...Bluntly, i don't understand it, i would love for you to give me the inspiration behind a piece with as much talent as this...The first thing i thought of when i read such lines as...

    Yet, they are everywhere,
    smothering us in numbers,
    holding us as their prisoners.
    Barring us in their drops of revelation,
    their merciless story is force-fed.

    There is no foreseeable end to it.
    The beginning is vague and forgotten.
    But until the raindrops end their prose,
    until the sky hits the ground
    and we are drenched in complete truth,
    we will watch the raindrops tell our stories,
    of hurt suffering and pain,
    happiness, love and rejoice.

    ...was religion...It seems to me the same sort of "story telling", force fed made to infulence others of one absolute truth...I'm sorry if i offend...But my friend this poem as masterful, a beautiful work of art and i would absolutely love to completely understand it...Help me! ...thank you so very much and Take care...I hope to hear from you...Travis
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... that was good... im adding this to my fav's and giving it a vote of 5! its so... ahh i cant find the words.. i just really love this one. i can understand it perfectly... a nice clear message... can't wait to read more of your stuff
    ~nameless child
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by nameless child | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this piece. You did a great job on using imagery. You toatally painted a vivid picture with your words. I espeacially liked the lines;

    There is no foreseeable end to it.
    The beginning is vague and forgotten.
    But until the raindrops end their prose,
    until the sky hits the ground
    and we are drenched in complete truth,

    You re a very talented writer and look forward to reading more of your work. I hope you get a chance to check out some of mine too. Have a great weekend.
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by Thornful Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      most impressive...and very touching...it was a good read...I do not have any advice to give except that it was a good poem...
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by Raksha | [ Reply to This ]



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