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    dots Submission Name: Sun Risedots
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    Author: colopoao
    ASL Info:    42/ Male / Hallowell Mai
    Elite Ratio:    4.89 - 62/55/18
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 975
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    Description:
       I was playing with words the other day and was trying to describe the actual act of a sunrise. For the most part I am pretty happy with this. I just thought I would put this out there for others to read. Hope you like it.....Chris


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    dotsSun Risedots
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    A shadow.....
    Wilting inside...
    The cavernous Mountain.....
    Opening up a canopy of
    Moonlight.....
    Glistening in the
    Morning Dew.....





    Submitted on 2004-09-19 09:26:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is a litle strange view of a sun rise, but I liked it. It's very thender and very poetic. It creates an atmosphere of sunrise mre than it describes it.
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      um im kinda lost in it
    i think the eclipses throw it off a lil bit
    you used strong words and verbs
    but im not so sure if i understand it really
    maybe develpoe it our add to it?
    you do use awesome words
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by scorpio sphinx | [ Reply to This ]
      Though the words in this are nice I don't think that they explain the setting very clearly because moonlight really has nothing to do with a sunrise in my opinion. Maybe its just me? As I said, nice language though. Sorry for not understanding.
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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