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    dots Submission Name: I Rememberdots
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    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       In memory of Melanie Jean Coury
    September 22, 1957- May 31, 2002
    I love you mama and I know your somewhere dancing on the moon with flowers in your hair.


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    I remember when;
    you use to blow out candles on a cake.
    The way your voice sounded as you sang.
    How you use to dance away the pain.

    I remember you were a great mother.
    And that you were always there for me.
    I rememver you.

    I remember when;
    You would claim I drove you insane.
    The way you called me by my whole name.
    How you never stated you were ashamed.

    I remember the addictions that sickened you.
    And how they transfered to me at an early age.
    I remember the real you.

    I remember when;
    Your chest still moved with breathe.
    The way you handeled others death.
    How you lived life depressed.

    Most of all, I remember that day.
    And how your life bled away.
    I remember only cause I have to.
    Your gone.




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      It sounds more like a song. Death, Love and War are the three realities that have the most overwhelming effect on human beings.
    real good peice !
    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm afraid this hit too close to home for me to say much. I lost my father two years ago and this was too much. I'm basically in shock and paralysis. I'm sorry. It is very touching when people writer stuff like this though.
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This is very moving. It brought tears to my eyes. Death is a very difficult thing to handle. Memories, on the other hand bring joy. Hold on to the memories and learn to embrace them like this poem states so beautifully.
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by colopoao | [ Reply to This ]


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