The Witching Hour by curiosityskitty

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Submission Name: The Witching Hour dots

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Author:	curiosityskitty
ASL Info:	30/F/TN
Elite Ratio:	3.2 - 145/149/30
Words:	94

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	392
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	656

Description:
Since I am unable to add the picture to the page, here is the link to a picture of the same name, the inspiration for this piece. http://www.enchanted-art.com/thewitchinghour_large.html

The Witching Hour dots

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The witching hour
Is well at hand
In this you must believe
Take heed, beware
And you will find
Intentions to deceive

This femme fatale
Will lull you to
Obedient submission
This sirens chants,
Seductive ways
Ensure sedate condition

She will consume
Your heart and soul
And leave a hollow shell
A tragic life
Will be your fate
While on this earth you dwell

This vixen has
But one intent
To claim your soul as prize
A deadly touch
As cold as ice
Bestows at last, demise.

Submitted on 2004-09-19 10:20:50 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this poem Kitty. It's nice and creepy (which is what I usually try to go for). I'm glad to see someone else writing about a witch type character.
As far as possible changes go: you could try putting in some punctuation (you never know, it might improve it), but for the most part I think it stands as is. Good 'un.

-DD
| Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
  Oooo, it's so wicked and evil, I love it. Have you ever seen "Hocus Pocus"? I would think everybody has by now. This poem reminds me of that movie so much because that is what those witches did.

I love the rhyming scheme, and it flows excellantly. This was brilliantly done. The content is pleasantly evil, I love the words you used. The last line is my favorite of this poem. It's so cool. It compliments the picture very well.
| Posted on 2004-11-05 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]
  I took into consideration the previous comment and this is what i came up with. Thanks for your input. I am much more pleased with this piece now.
| Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by curiosityskitty | [ Reply to This ]
  i think this is great
i love certain words you use like vixen and femme fatale (even though ido consider it cliché most of the time it works SO well here you owned it)
its keeps a constant tone and feel
i think the only thing that im not too big of a fan of is ending the stanza with requisition becuase it so big and has so many sylables that it throws of the flow
at least when i read it
and it is pretty early for me

amazing though
i loved it
the beat was very good
| Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by scorpio sphinx | [ Reply to This ]
  Excellent, plane and simple...This piece points a vivid picture of the vixeness women with a lust to lure...Though i've gotta know, what inspires such a character...This piece is masterfully written and flows so very smoothly, as well your rhyme scheme doesn't hinder the message of the poem...Bravo my friend, you've created a work of art...But i would really love to know what emotions went into a poem such as this...You kill astounds and i feel lucky to be able to read your heart...thank you again my friend, i hope to hear from you...Take care...Travis
| Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]

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