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    dots Submission Name: Butterfly Lovedots
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    Author: lost_escape
    ASL Info:    16/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 44/60/23
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 242
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 898



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       about my sister.


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    dotsButterfly Lovedots
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    As she takes flight,
    the colors confuse her.
    She never met a real man,
    just another abuser.
    One to bat her around,
    or hang her as a trophy.
    Never just to love her beautiful colors,
    her heart, to hold the key.
    She used to be happy,
    she used to be young.
    But her wings are growing older,
    her song’s already been sung.
    The day her cocoon broke,
    and she flew through the skies,
    she swore she’d find true love,
    but all she got was lies.
    She died today,
    and all the gods were mad
    The begged her to stay,
    but she was too sad.
    Maybe you’ll see her,
    and her hidden loveliness.
    It’s probably her,
    to her you must caress.
    You must love her forever,
    and hold her always.
    Because her love is great,
    and lasts all the days.




    Submitted on 2004-09-19 22:11:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow this was great... it flowed very well... and brought great imagery to my mind. Great title and idea for the piece... relating it to a butterfly... and the colors. great. I loved it. :D

    Also... what part of texas are you in? I live there as well. :) In san antonio...
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      amazing illustrations with the wording, but almost a little redundent, try shortening and sweetening it, but overall i loved it completely.
    | Posted on 2004-09-19 00:00:00 | by Josh | [ Reply to This ]



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