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look to the past


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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Words: 273
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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look to the past



African Warrior, Gentle and strong.
It won’t be long.
The present won’t last.
Look to the past
To see the leaders and the kings
Look for the one who sings
The one to whom Alex Haley
Went to see.
The women who let the slaves go free.
You know Tubman, but do you know Shad,
Mary Ann was the one who had,
A law degree, after being free.
Do you see the philosophy?
Free your mind from your own pain.
Listen to me as I explain.
Don’t let their trials be in vain,
They broke free form slaverys chain.
You come from warriors, you come from kings.
You can soar so high from your legacy’s wings.
Shaka Zulu, Selassie high,
Ferti;e forests and lands so dry.
Akhenaton and Nefertiti,
Did you know he’s her sweetie?
Imhotep, and the phrase he said.
“Eat, drink, and be merry,
for tomorrow we’ll all be dead.
Claude Mckay, Langston Hughs
Ella and the lady that sings the blues.
See line woman,
See her rise,
Madam Walker and her hair surprise.
Rosa Parks and Doctor King.
Marvin Gaye, can you hear him sing?
Brother, brother brother,
Still Far too many of you dying.
WE need more of you out there trying,
To continue the dream.
To be a team.
March more than a million deep.
Let those that doubt you scream and weep.
Live in fear, that the day is near
For a colorfull nation
Unbeatable. Unreachable.
Unshakable. Untouchable. Undeniable.
With a future as strong as the past.




Submitted on 2004-09-19 23:51:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Incredible my friend, simply inspiring! you've created a true work of art in tis piece and i'd be honored to have it grace my favorites list. The message is so strong and beautiful, to let those that fought for freedom, to let those that revolutionized a world, to let those that impacted the lives of not only themselces but a million others to give you the strength to do great things and rise above for all to see... My friend i believe in growing from the past tough it is important not to dwell in it... you must set your own coarse and learn from the guidance of the ones before you to make things clear, to make a path with no bonds or limits... You're quite the masterful poet and it was an honor to be able to read your heart, fantasticaly done... Take care and i hope to hear from you... Adios! Travis
| Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
  rather interesting, i must say. i'm intrigued to know what compelled you to write this. strangely enough, it just seems so familiar. maybe i'm just imagining things.
it's nice, but the rhyme seems forced. try to let it flow. poetry doesn't always have to rhyme.
i'm gonna read you're other piece. hope i'll like it too
| Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by hybridmagnolia | [ Reply to This ]


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