Are we ok?
You asked me
After we …
Fell back down from the stars.
You knew we are ok.
| hm... short, simple... not bad at all considering length. i'm gonna let u in on a quick suggestion though. i've told this to another writer i noticed had the same thing going on:|
you're writing is short and gets a point across. however, it's seems to have left something behind. i can see more just begging to be added to this. more description, more story, more history, more feeling... i can feel untapped potential, as if you're holding back. don't. go for it. everything or nothing. that's what'll get you far.
with that said, congrats. you're on my fav list.
welcome to the site
|| Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by hybridmagnolia | [ Reply to This ] |