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    dots Submission Name: Outerspacedots

    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 11
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Space makes space-
    from more space
    to be,

    Submitted on 2004-09-20 09:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, the concept is rather apt. Sketches a view of both inner and outer infinites, even if you don't say so. I don't really have any criticism, I am just unsure whether that first "space" was part of the poem. If so, it isn't really necessary.
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]

    Space makes space-
    from more space
    to be,


    Food demands space-
    from more space
    to be
    Mainly below the waste.

    Sorry, couldn't resist.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, my head! What you said in this was very thought provoking, and too me it seems like the concept of infinity when you can only except it and not know or prove it anyway. I prefer not to go there but a good write nonetheless.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      This turned over in my head and tickled my tounge as an oddity, to be turned and examined several times. can you really place space though.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought I wrote quickies but you make me look like Looongfellow. It was a fun little ditty and I enjoyed reading it. Others might disagree.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]

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