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    dots Submission Name: God's Wishdots
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    Author: dmm
    ASL Info:    50/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 741/888/102
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGod's Wishdots
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    Close thine eyes
    Go to sleep
    Be born upon the earth
    Forget
    Take form
    Judge creation's worth
    Be alone
    Seek the path
    Taste the bitter draught
    Love
    Let there be tears
    Learn what thou are not





    Submitted on 2004-09-20 11:01:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ahh... the bold hit of reality... the thin line between what we as humans want and what God wants for us. I like how your poem was kind of like a time line. It's cool. Subtle, yet cool. Good work.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by winged_writer_robyn | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm. . . I don't think this is God's wish for us, but it's definitely a good description of life. . . sorta like someone's always out to get you. Great write!
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this poems is good . i agree with eah you could do some stuff to it but its not that important... it is still good as it is.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by Wolfdawn | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks for the read. You tell God to tidy this up cause I wrote it the way He told me to(Yuk Yuk)I'll take your suggestion to heart.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it, and I'm going to add it to my favorites list. I do think there needs to be a bit of tiding up of this poem... but not much! I like it alot!
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by Eah | [ Reply to This ]
      Right, learn what you are not. Boy, no one I know is trying for that one. We all want to be all we can be, and then some,
    nice sentiments.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem.. its basically just a short description of your way through life.. good job... i can connect every line to something through life.. but anyways good job
    ~nameless child
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by nameless child | [ Reply to This ]



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