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    dots Submission Name: Mommy -- reviseddots
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    Author: curiosityskitty
    ASL Info:    30/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 145/149/30
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMommy -- reviseddots
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    Darkness comes, alone again
    Tears begin to fall.
    Her mind drifts off, gripped with thoughts
    Of ways to end it all.

    Despair gains strength, and day by day
    Her plans become more clear.
    No longer willing, she feels she can't
    Survive another year.

    But something's there that drives her from
    What she feels she's forced to do.
    A tiny touch, a smiling face
    Her strength he will renew.

    He fills her soul, and gives her life
    Her pain he will erase
    This baby boy, her precious child
    Her gift her saving grace




    Submitted on 2004-09-21 01:09:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey great write curios person. lifes a [censored] some time but you got to keep it together for the kids. i cant relate but i know life is hard as a parent but aparently its worth it. im glad your staying strong for your son. what the poem is about is great and the writting is great too. the rhyme and flow is perfect and its very touching. its a great write. well done.
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by nameless_nobody | [ Reply to This ]
      i actually have a poem similar to this one.. with the exact same meaning! it's great.. and well put out. i like how the last stanza ended. please tell me ASAP how do you post a revised poem?
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by blonde_honey418 | [ Reply to This ]
      woah: amazingly powerful: u have a great way with using words for emotion: but u might want to try using more abstract terms instead of making it a clear cut story.
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by littlecoombs | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a time with abstract thinking. I'm very literal. lol re-write this and send it to me as an example.
    thanks for the input.
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by curiosityskitty | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! Wonderful poem. How sweet hope can emerge through the darkest moments of despair! You captured it well. Very good poem.
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by kochu | [ Reply to This ]



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