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    dots Submission Name: The Key Chaindots
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    Author: Eah
    ASL Info:    20/F/KY
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 74/81/22
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 268
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 519



    Description:
       Describing the symbols of a broken friendship


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    dotsThe Key Chaindots
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    There it lies on the table again!
    Don't you know what it is?
    It says "fun in the sun!"
    But the sun is gone,
    And it won't be coming back any time soon

    Finally the chain has broken
    And the keys scatter across the floor
    You see me, and I see you no more.
    If only one of us would grow up!

    There it is on the table again!
    My heart and my mind.
    But you wouldn't know,
    Because you're not here.




    Submitted on 2004-09-21 09:37:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ouch!...this seems almost hatefull, yet it seems filled with love at the same time...its not anger its frustration at someone...maybe its just me, i dont know i tend to look or see deeper than most...keep it up and change for no one...mojo
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by decrepidcorpse | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. this is really good. Reminds me of my ex. I like it alot. I think it could be a little longer to explain a bit more but i think that it is good as is also. I really like the last line of the last stanza. Very good.
    Thanks for sharing
    Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
      A very symbolic write in my opinion. I enjoyed it because of that and I never get a nice feeling when someone writes something like this though. That maybe just me. I think that if you try to add anything to this, it will lose its impact.
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]



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