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    dots Submission Name: Springtime is Violentdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSpringtime is Violentdots

    Springtime is violent--
    blades of grass fling themselves toward the sun.
    Flowers knock their heads around and between rocks,
    and heavy raindrops bludgeon the ground.
    As the air sweetens,
    emotions get equally fickle,
    equally harsh.
    You pledge your undying love
    then tell me to go to hell
    while your body trembles with need.
    As I walk away,
    you chase me, tackle me
    and kisses rain down like it's April,
    but all is forgiven
    as we mesmerize each other with smiles.

    Submitted on 2004-09-21 15:30:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's pretty hot stuff. How can you go wrong with spring,flowers and kisses(and desire)all in the same poem. I don't really care cause it doesn't hurt the piece but the fruit won't be heavy 'til late summer. Love ya!
    | Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      Well... that's one way to see Spring, lol
    I liked it. At first i thought it was just a different view of Spring, but as i read further down, i saw it was deeper than that. I don't want to ruin this for ay future readers, but i'll be really blank about it. Better yet, how bout i just keep my interpretation to myself? It is deep though people, so read it a couple of times to make sure you get it.
    AKen Sol
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by Aken Sol | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting viewpoint. very original to compare love to springtime, but it fits. I understand the flowers and rock part, I find it quite amazing how such little plants grow through everything. but my favourite part were the lines
    "You chase me, tackle me
    And kisses rain down like it's April
    But all is forgiven
    As we mesmerize each other with smiles"
    a great ending, I especially like the part about the kisses. very well done, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Such great images of Spring...very creative way of thinking about it. Fantastic how the fruit "bludgeons" the ground. (I like that word) Love how the poem seemlessly changes from the "violent" description of nature to the "equally harsh" business of romance. You do a great job of creating the world of the restless lovers...gives the feeling of too much emotion to contain. Very enjoyable piece!
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]

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