Description: Ok, it's pretty obvious what it's about to me, but I'm the writer, so it should be. I want to see how obvious it is to all y'all. Sorry if my puncuation makes my poems incomprehensible, I write in word, and then copy and paste, so all of my quotations, apostraphes, and ellipses become question marks.
Dew-drops of lover's eyes,
Gracing beautiful unmoving lips,
Ill-informed to the pain of which they are wrought.
Memories are left to the heart,
But they are frayed,
For so is the vessel upon which they rest.
A promise broken,
Dreams gone amok,
Proved once again...your a kick ass poet. Never ever stop writing or I will find you...and...hurt you? Lol..jk. But I do mean it, if I ever find out you stopped I'd get angry. Your awsome, and write beautiful poems. NEVER EVER EVER STOP! Heh...just getting my point across. Keep it up...
Your poem on betrayal? I thought alot about it. 1st, the word betrayal. Before I even started to read the poem, I thought to myself who has betrayed me? I really, have been betrayed quite a few times. I think its because Im naive. I thought of friends that betrayed me, boys that betrayed me. I read the poem, and it applied mostly to a person that betrayed me. I was kinda seeing this boy. AND then I found out that he had slept with this dirty whore and she thought she was pregnant. Wow. I dont know WHY I just told you that, probably because you asked. But yah. Theres the story, short and sweet. Im off. -Andrya
What can I say? Beautiful? Wonderful? This is outstanding, this revision is only a little refinery to get it even better. . . "Dew-drops of a lover's eyes, Gracing resplendent, immobile lips Ill-informed in the image of the pain from which they are wrought. Memories are left to the heart, But they are frayed And only a dream that become more meaningless by the hour - For such is the vessel upon which they rest. A promise broken, Dreams gone amok, No remorse. . .
I love. . . let me know if you do a rewrite. -Secret
to me these simple words sound just like what the title says, betrayl...it seems like there was love, once and it was long and careful but still loving, but they lied once...and once a liar always a liar and then their mouths no longer move all you hear are tainting descripinces..(don't know how to spell that)...I hope you get my meaning...or am I way off base here?
for me, i think it is pretty much straight to the point... 'dew drops' referring to tears... 'Gracing beautiful unmoving lips, Ill-informed to the pain of which they are wrought' referring to the fact that the person was informed of the betrayal that took place... 'Memories are left to the heart, But they are frayed, For so is the vessel upon which they rest' i think means that the memories that were supposedly the only things left were already lost and so is the heart that (i think) loved once but not anymore... well, that's my literal interpretation... i could be wrong but it's nicely done...