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    dots Submission Name: Father's Eyesdots
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    Author: mandyshay07
    ASL Info:    17/f/kentucky yall!
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 119/121/32
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 399
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 740



    Description:
       decided to write about God's eyes.. not necessarily bodily eyes, but his perspective..how he sees us. bash it, compliment it, whatever, i just want some feedback.


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    dotsFather's Eyesdots
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    Bottomless eyes,
    blue as the ocean waves
    crashing on the sand.

    Deep as the sea,
    rippling beneath stormy skies.

    Knowing eyes,
    full of laughter and passion,
    a twinkle accompanying every smile.

    Loving eyes,
    full of compassion,
    overflowing with tears of joy
    and drippping tears of sorrow
    for lambs gone astray.

    Eyes that see beyond every face,
    but continue to love just the same.

    Eyes not for bodies
    or colors
    or the great wonders of the world.

    Eyes for love and purity,
    for hearts and souls,
    where real beauty lies.

    My Father's eyes.




    Submitted on 2004-09-21 19:42:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i can understand where u get the eyes concept form, but except for the last line, why did u include the idea of your father's eyes? if u left it out, and made it more of what u see, i think it would have been even better, though it was good already.
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      Woah: that one sent tingles down my spine: That is ablsoutley amazing:THankyou so much for that: It flows really well but its what you say that makes it great: stright to my favourites list
    | Posted on 2004-09-21 00:00:00 | by littlecoombs | [ Reply to This ]



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