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    dots Submission Name: Dreamdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDreamdots
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    Before my eyes
    I don't want to see a thing
    I want to turn off the world
    I want to forget everything
    I want to be nothing
    And just to dream







    Submitted on 2004-02-28 09:50:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, you fit a lot of meaning into such a short poem. It makes you think, but it might work better a bit longer as you can use some imagery. Thanks Lissy.
    | Posted on 2004-02-28 00:00:00 | by selfbetrayal | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece very much. You are a wonder, cuddle, always converying your thoughts and emotiuons in so smal a space. I suppose in a way that shows your control. Sometimes I feel I have to keep writing forever to show everyone how much bigger I am than I seem...anyway, aside form my own little analysis of myself there, this is good, peaceful piece. Great job.

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-02-28 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]


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