you hold my hand

Author: mimi ASL Info:    30/f/ny Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111 Words: 84

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you hold my hand

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You hold my hand, and We go to a time, a place, To a space where the Water leaves the ocean, to kiss the sand beneath our feet. Our fingers meet and We become one. The music in our lives Beat to the same Ageless rhythm and we show our love. You hold my hand As you demand The world to see That I am yours and You belong to me.

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"A truly romantic piece of work ringing with honesty and emotion. "We go to a time, a place, To a space where the water leaves the ocean, to kiss the sand beneath our feet."--great lines--You express yourself very well---Great job--will check in on more of your stuff.---- ---Mugs--

| Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]

That is great! Very sweet short poem but it says more and hide deep love to this one you love, I hope it was me . I'm going to add it to my favourites. Well done. Khaled Abdallah.

| Posted on 2004-09-26 00:00:00 | by Khaled AbdAllah | [ Reply to This ]

this is so awesome! it reminds me of my girl back home. you really hit me with this one, hands are the best, when i take my girls hand, there is NOTHING better than that...other than...well, we won't go there, thank you for writing this, i enjoyed ot immensely. God, you got me missing her like crazy! great job

| Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]

Very sweet and simple, and yet I loved it. I think many people can relate to this, touch can bring out so many feelings. Especially with someone you love. A simple act like holding hands has so many hidden meanings, it is a connection and a badge. It shows the world that you stand united with the one beside you, and they are your's and you are their's. You conveyed this beautifully. Good job my friend, keep it up.

| Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by ACircuitShock | [ Reply to This ]

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