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    dots Submission Name: my SIX worst poemsdots
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    Author: nameless_nobody
    ASL Info:    18 in a few days.
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 333/421/67
    Words: 412
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 2964
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    Description:
       this is just a place to put the bad poems not worthy of a seperate post. bash away here


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    dotsmy SIX worst poemsdots
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    HOW DARE:

    how dare the world keep spinning
    how dare you keep on grinning
    how dare life go on
    how dare you keep on sinning

    my love is dead

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    SEX SHOP LOVE:


    we met in the corner
    between the dildo shelf
    and the prono mag rack
    we met in a busy shop
    as the porn movies played
    and the whips were cracked

    now we are in love
    sex shop love

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    BAD GIRL:

    i dont want your name
    i dont want your number
    i want you to play the game
    i want you in rubber

    i dont want to buy you flowers
    i dont want to go on dates
    i want to feel some power
    as i watch you masterbate

    i dont want you to get your hair done
    i dont want you to get new shoes
    i want you to be fun
    i want you with tattoos

    i dont want to kiss you
    i dont want romeo and juliet
    i just want to screw
    i want to get you into bed.

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    DAMN CLOCK:

    its 10pm im bored
    its 11pm there nothing on tv
    its 12pm the computer crashed
    its 1am im really tired
    its 2am im looking at porn
    its 3am im haveing a smoke
    its 4am im pondering the great questions
    its 5am im drinking coffie
    its 6am im writting shit poetry for mindless morons who think they are special cos they can make a few words rhyme.
    its 7am the clock just stoped

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    MIGHTY OAK:

    a mighty oak tree
    hundreds of years
    in the makeing
    lies rotting on the ground.
    its slowly being eaten away
    by woodworm and fungus
    to leave hollow shell
    of what once was.
    around it are other trees
    damaged as the oak colapsed.
    years of growth undone
    by one falling tree.
    a mighty oak tree
    hundreds of years
    in the makeing
    lies dead in the cold dark forest.

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    NUMBERS GAME:

    10 years of failed marrage
    2 in seperate beds
    8 months of constant fighting
    400 times you've wished me dead
    5 years of depression
    6 hours in this bar
    8 glasses os whisky
    19 shakey steps to my car
    2 minutes to find the keys
    7 miles home to bed
    3 boxes of tablets
    not 1 minute of regret.

    see you in hell.




    Submitted on 2004-09-22 11:10:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't think all of these are bad poems, I actually like most of em! You seem to have a real knack for writing, you are very talented and I hope you keep on writing!
    I am gonna add this to my favorites list... it's actually pretty neat poetry in my eyes. Keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      actually i liked Bad Girl. the other ones were a little, um, way to simple for my liking. but i think if you tweaked Bad Girl juuuuuust a little i would be really good
    | Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]
      I personally liked the last one. Ive never heard of someone posting their worst poems and actually classifying them under that. Im not going to go over grammatical errors or spelling with you, because these poems symbolize something different. They show that theres good, theres bad, and then theres worse (although none of these were worse, or bad for that matter) They were simple words, simply put, but at the same time each poem meant something, contained a theme and had expression to it.
    Anways. I was drawn in by the title. What a different title.
    I personally liked this compilation of poems. it was amusing.
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-11-29 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]
      in the second one should that be porno not prono?
    Some of these i actually liked. I thought they were kinda cool. Some of them not all. I liked Bad girl. I think thats ok not worthy of a seperate post but still kinda cool. See you in hell that was funny. Ok sorry i'll leave now
    Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
      What's wrong with these poems?
    Sure they've got no meaning,
    they have terrible flow and pace,
    yes, perhaps they are a bit crude,
    and maybe even wrong,
    of course, they are dry and cumbersome,
    but, man, the show style...
    no matter how bad that style is
    | Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by Eggman | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, you were correct for putting "4 worst poems" as the title. Heh, the last one is not so bad, but the first three are like.. woah.. that is poetry? But I like the last line in the last poem. That ended it well and it kind of took me by surprise. I like surprise endings, they seem to make the whole poem better. Ha ha, well anyways. Yeah.. the last one was alright.
    | Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]
      well i have to say that you are right they are shi**y poems. i kind of liked the last one but not as a poem maybe random thoughts. good work at sucking lol

    lia
    | Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      How Dare:
    I didn't like the rhyming in it... I don't genearlly like rhyming poetry, unless there's a reason for it, and in this case, it seemed to be just rambling rhyming, which is always VERY annoying...


    Damn Clock:
    You might not want to hear this, but I liked this one. I mean yes it's very monotonous, but it doesn't rhyme, it bashes rhyming, and it's hold some aspect of curiousity by what you meant when you said "the clock just stopped" is that a litearal or a figurative meaning?
    | Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by Eah | [ Reply to This ]


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