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Daddy's little girl


Author: selfbetrayal
ASL Info:    19/F/NA
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This is one I wrote when I'd just had an argument with...you've guessed it -Dad. I know it's repetitive but it's one of my favourites. Sorry.


Daddy's little girl



I'm sorry I'm not what you thought I should be
I'm sorry I don't make you smile,
I'm sorry you're not happy when you look at me
that my prescence seems less than worthwhile.
I'm sorry I'm not beautiful or perfect to you
Sorry I just don't fit in,
I'm sorry my life isn't sticking together
and you don't want it in pieces again.


Daddy...I'm sorry all the times that I tried
to be what you wanted me to,
but failed at my attempts to be your angel...
Sorry I couldn't be that for you.
I'm sorry my dreams just weren't good enough
Sorry I made your heart break,
I'm sorry I wasn't your wonderful child,
all I did was drive you insane.


Daddy...forgive me for the life I can't change,
I'm sorry for bringing you down.
I'm sorry for being your disgrace little girl -
I'm sorry my smile is a frown.





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  Ah the searing pain of believing you aren't good enough. I am sorry that you feel this way and that you were in such a situation. This is a well written piece despite the pain.



Sage


P.S. Keep writing and one day you'll e able to face all of your troubles in ink as I do mine.
| Posted on 2007-01-24 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes, there it is repetitous but it is in a simple format and the repetition gives validity to it.

I am not sure what has happened to you and your father but I am a firm believer that the goals and values of our children are set by the parent.
If my child does not meet those standards then it is not a crime and we will accept them for who they are. I have five children. Two sons and three daughters. Each are different in their own way and I love each one because of that

If one does something that saddens me then we will discuss it and move on. I believe that we have to reward our children for good and bad.

I have a daughter that is sort of a wild child but she is mine none the less and I accept her for who she is. She is exactly the child I want.
By the way she is a daddy's girl in ever way.

Like I said before I like the simplicity of this write.

Keep them coming

Respect and Admiration

Clyde
| Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
  I know I have posted a message on this before, but this in fact is my favorite of your collection.
Thanks again for stopping by and reading me, And I'll always enjoy this one.
Until later, cheers
| Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
  As a parent/grandparent, I can relate to your feeling. Many times I failed to be the light my 'little girls' needed, and the path they chose not mine. however even with all the desention of teenage years today they love me for being the guide-rail and the fence keeping their buggy from leaving the road no matter how rocky it may have been.
You have written well also of the inner feelings teens feel, but the light I hope you soon will see, may it shine on you today!
A great work here, be proud and write often for your talent of conveying truth is in need for others.
| Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
  this was great. you definately got your message accrossed. i belive that there is a lot of emotion in it. you did a great job keep it up lia
| Posted on 2004-06-10 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  You did well with this poem. I guest we growing up, always will get in arguements with our parents, and we have to deal with these things, but as long as we can find a crutch or someone to rely on to help us when these times get tough then it helps us break our fall a bit. I like this. I think you protrayed your feelings well, and you used great word usage.

Julian
| Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by Nashataku | [ Reply to This ]
  You got your message across... I think it's good. It says what it says directly in first person talking to it. As a writer I suggest you use this same piece and rewrite it entirely without first person and without directly saying what you mean. Make it into a metaphorical piece using experience or parallels to show what your saying rather than directly say what is being said. Guilt is always a hell especially when it's burning up for so long.
| Posted on 2004-03-31 00:00:00 | by Webmaster | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this very much and can relate. I hate to think of someone else feeling this way though. I think you need a hug.
| Posted on 2004-02-28 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  I differ in opinion on whether or not this is the best worded... it is great! excellent display of a daddy's little girl's emotions when she feels and accepts that she hasnt owned up to being what he planned for her... great writing with a child-like innocence about it... keep em coming
| Posted on 2004-02-28 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]


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