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    dots Submission Name: The Start of Lovedots
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    Author: lost_escape
    ASL Info:    16/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 44/60/23
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 282
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    dotsThe Start of Lovedots
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    Surpassing the movement throughout the universe,
    We are together.
    Physically, but more emotionally, in an essence,
    Will it last forever?
    Careening the senses, exploring the thought.
    You intigue me.
    We discover the compelling emotions
    everyone can see.
    Inhale, exhale, the nerveousness dissapeared.
    More comfort found.
    The sureness this will last thorugh anything
    love will abound.
    The unsettling fear that one will end up hurt.
    Forget one another
    Creation and existance will be destroyed,
    if one lost the other.
    I'm becoming a better person
    because of you alone
    And evertime I'm with you
    I'll make my love be shown.




    Submitted on 2004-09-22 21:32:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is written very interestingly, and I don't normally like poetry that's broken up into such long lines, but the wording and thought of this poem is amazing. I feel as if this were written about my own thoughts, because this es EXACTLY the way I feel about my boyfriend. He is the love of my life and I fear nothing greater than losing him. I feel that being with him has made me a better person. This describes the way I feel perfectly. Beautifully worded too!
    | Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by Scribbles1338 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really sweat, i like it, this is how i felt about my ex, how i still feel about my ex...but she is my ex, i hope it doean't happen like that for you. yeah i really like this
    | Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]



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