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Author: Scribbles1338
ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169 /167 /37
Words: 260
Class/Type: Prose /Being a Teen
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I think we have all had a time when we were up late on the internet talking to someone, and we didn't know what to say. Whether it's about a fight, or just confused while talking to a crush...this describes a moment in my life when I was at a complete loss for words...a rare occurance.


Entranced by the captivating glow of the screen, she sits, staring in wonder. Her fingers delicately brush against the keys, but she does not type. Hesitantly, she glances down at the keyboard, speechless, not knowing what to say. She was never at a loss for words, not until now.
Hesitantly, her fingers begin to move over the keys, slowly typing, as if a little piece of her soul were dying with every letter. Choked up, confused, embarrassed. She bites her lip, wondering whether to press “send” or not, wondering if her reply is the correct one.
It isn’t.
She deletes it all and starts over, her eyes brimming with tears of sheer frustration. The light from the screen casts a glow over the dark room, and she feels trapped with no escape.
Each passing minute feels like an hour to this girl trapped in black loneliness. She doesn’t even know who she is anymore.
An emotional rush makes her head spin; still not knowing what to say or do frustrates her further. She had always been the strong one...
“I can’t avoid replying forever, can I…” she trails off to herself. “I have to say something. But what?”
As her fingers skim the keys one more time, she feels more vulnerable than she knew she could ever feel, but she musters up enough strength to continue.
Overwhelmed with terror and anticipation, she trembles as her hand rests on the mouse.
The darkness of the room engulfs her and she begins to weep.

Submitted on 2004-09-22 21:50:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow. very powerfull story. I can almost feel what a hard time the girl is having. but why was it so hard? you are very good at getting your emotions across to the reader.
| Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by 3TOMANY | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds to me like she has received a 'dear john (or jane in this case) letter. Someone that she thought loved her has broken her heart. That's just what I got from it. Very emotional.
| Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by curiosityskitty | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow...I'm truly speechless. That was absolutely incredible writing, you evoked such feeling in it...I was completely blown away. I loved the ending, I thought it was conveyed nicely and left everything at exactly the right time. You have an amazing way with words and, telling from this piece, you obviously have a lot of talent. btw welcome to the site!
| Posted on 2004-09-22 00:00:00 | by Babysweet56 | [ Reply to This ]
  It sounds almost too teen like to even be made into a well rounded emotional poem. but you truly did that, and i think so many can relate! I found my self being engrossed by your words, because they rang so true, but then again, the theme may not be well recieved with older, more learned people. If it ever got that hard for me to typ online, id try to call them, it always seems to help with me.
| Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Josh | [ Reply to This ]

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