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Submission Name: Love song dots

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Author:	curiosityskitty
ASL Info:	30/F/TN
Elite Ratio:	3.2 - 145/149/30
Words:	116

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	440
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	747

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Love song dots

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My days were too short
My nights were too long
Alone with my fears
It was hard to be strong

With no one to care
I slowly drifted astray
My soul wrought by grief
I wept everyday

I prayed for an angel
I was down on my knee
Afraid God would not hear
'Til he sent you to me

Now draped in your love
Embraced by your kiss
I thank God every second
That he lifted the mist

I gave you my heart
My body and soul
No longer broken
You've made me whole

Together we've spun
A veil woven of glory
Shielding us from the world
And telling our story

Submitted on 2004-09-23 00:22:22 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  This poem really touched me because I have a daughter named Brandi and she loves angels.
The thing that made it slip into place for me (so to speak) is the fact that I never get to see her.
Very heart lifting poem to me.
!Doc~
| Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  After reading this again i have decided that this one will certainly be amoung my favorites. And so it is added so I can have quick reference to it.
Thanks again for sharing this poem
!Doc~
| Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  beautiful gift, and not bad for someone that does not do love poems.... it has element so fcinderella, with the happily ever after theme after a not so happy begining......
My soul wrought by heartache
But feared God would not hear
Protecting us from the world

these a little too long and nterrupt the flowof the poem. ....

and why did you choose to use the only punctuation in the whole poem as the comma before the capital 'Drapped'??
| Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
  much better, I'v even added it one of my favorites....
and sorry about the punctuation... I recently read the shoots, eats and leaves book of punctuation, so I am more aware of commas than I would like!
| Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
  Is this really the first love poem you wrote? If so you did a good job. I know it's hard to write outside of your main subjec as I have asked by by many friends to write something for them.
| Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]
  Love it. the no punctuation thingy made the whole poem flow.pretty good love poem.felt like it came from your heart.the rhyming was pretty good. the breivity of the words was also well done. and congrats on winning the contest.
| Posted on 2004-11-01 00:00:00 | by whyme | [ Reply to This ]

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