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my wish list

Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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Words: 109
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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my wish list

My wish list is simple.
When we stand side-by-side
in a room full of people,
reach your hands out to mine.
Cradle my fingers in the warmth of your palms,
and bind us.
At night, in rem, as you dream,
Turn to me, and let’s become a spooning puzzle, and
be united
Moonlight. Long walks.
Stolen kisses. Slow dancing.
Arm in arm. Fingers linked.
Eyes connecting across a room.
Heartbeats. Memories shared.
New ones made. Long years ahead.
Your heart, your soul,
The space between your heartbeats.
Every spare moment of your thoughts.
Give your love.
Your desire.
Your need.

Submitted on 2004-09-23 01:36:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This sounds so much like the list of things that every woman I've dated has asked for and not gotten... not an unreasonable list, and it saddens me that so often I'm unable to provide such basic relationship needs. I guess, giving it some more thought, these are the things I'm looking for too... and just haven't found yet.
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a very intimate wish list. The use of dancing as the main focus was a good metaphor to demonstrate the two halves of the relationship. This was soft and warm and lovely.

Thank you for sharing it with us.
| Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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