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Waiting


Author: Marbles
ASL Info:    24/M/IN
Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 46 /70 /19
Words: 68
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Average Vote:    3.0000
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Description:


Just to vent my emotions were I can't else were


Waiting



Cringing in a corner
Waiting for you to come back
Wanting everything I can't have
Some one, please give me some slack

Don't know how long I can stand this
I want this to end
Misery and loneliness
Destroys me in the end

No trust for me from anyone
I want to earn it back
I know I messed up
So won't you please come back




Submitted on 2004-09-23 08:09:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Waiting for wishes, waiting for something special, all in all with life we wait. This piece is nicely written. I like how you deepen your message into brief and simple words. That's nice.
| Posted on 2004-11-02 00:00:00 | by Njud_Gold | [ Reply to This ]
  You did well conveying the feeling with a natural flow...a few spelling mistakes...throw it in microsoft word pre post time...they'll be highlighted in red. Not too bad otherwise...promising
| Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
  This isn't particularly original or insightful. However it somehow managed to be very realistic. I don't know if that combination is a good thing or a bad thing, but its a real thing.
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| Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]


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