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Growin Cold

Author: medicated
ASL Info:    18
Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 269 /369 /98
Words: 253
Class/Type: Lyrics /Depressed
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i just wrote it so i would really like to have some feedback, thoughts ,ideas, whatever.....
If you did thanx
and if you didn't
well thanx N E ways for lookin at it for the least......

Growin Cold

im growin cold within
sleepless nights
torment me more and more
it's like this
playin your games
it's like your
shoveling in shame

i feel the nightmares comes
but i'm awake
and i see evrything's
gone wrong
didn't make her any less
she fucked me up all
since the first time

And i can't help but
see what she could do to me
i used to be alive
she used heart
as a knife
stabbed and torn
on the inside

god i want to die
i used to feel alive
and i'd love to watch
myself burn

it's like this
playin your games
it's like your
shoveling in shame
and all the love she had
is gone
and the only way she feels
is to kill every one inside

i see the bodies lined up
killed ourselves for her

i love to watch myself burn
as the pains growing
and the fear i'v given into

they told me to help
her feel alive
and i loved
so i tried
but she fucked me up all inside

she can't stop playin her games
she can't stop playin her games, no
but everyone fell in love with her
just to see her body strip
but they don't see she's all fake

and i feel the life around me disintegrate
i want to feel alive
and they paid to watch me burn......fuck it

Submitted on 2004-09-23 18:13:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow...these lyrics are great...i would love to hear this song played so i could match it to the music, the beat...your wording is terrific and the feeling behind it is so chaotic...the flow is great even though you have the lines broken up so many ways...i think you have a lot of talent and i'm looking foward to reading more of your work...
| Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]

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