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    dots Submission Name: Growin Colddots
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    Author: medicated
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 269/369/98
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    Bytes: 1662



    Description:
       i just wrote it so i would really like to have some feedback, thoughts ,ideas, whatever.....
    If you did thanx
    and if you didn't
    well thanx N E ways for lookin at it for the least......


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    dotsGrowin Colddots
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    im growin cold within
    sleepless nights
    torment me more and more
    it's like this
    playin your games
    it's like your
    shoveling in shame

    i feel the nightmares comes
    but i'm awake
    and i see evrything's
    gone wrong
    didn't make her any less
    she fucked me up all
    inside
    since the first time

    And i can't help but
    see what she could do to me
    i used to be alive
    she used heart
    as a knife
    stabbed and torn
    on the inside

    god i want to die
    i used to feel alive
    and i'd love to watch
    myself burn

    it's like this
    playin your games
    it's like your
    shoveling in shame
    and all the love she had
    is gone
    and the only way she feels
    alive
    is to kill every one inside

    suicidal
    i see the bodies lined up
    killed ourselves for her

    i love to watch myself burn
    as the pains growing
    and the fear i'v given into

    they told me to help
    her feel alive
    and i loved
    so i tried
    but she fucked me up all inside

    she can't stop playin her games
    she can't stop playin her games, no
    but everyone fell in love with her
    just to see her body strip
    but they don't see she's all fake

    and i feel the life around me disintegrate
    i want to feel alive
    and they paid to watch me burn......fuck it




    Submitted on 2004-09-23 18:13:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow...these lyrics are great...i would love to hear this song played so i could match it to the music, the beat...your wording is terrific and the feeling behind it is so chaotic...the flow is great even though you have the lines broken up so many ways...i think you have a lot of talent and i'm looking foward to reading more of your work...
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]


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