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    dots Submission Name: Saluddots
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    Author: Apocalyptica
    Elite Ratio:    6.41 - 79/66/10
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    Description:
       I wrote this for the love of my life, AMA...She moved a few months ago. This was written in reflection of all the times we had shared together.

    Also, the spanish part in the chorus says:
    Porque - Because

    Pero - But

    Te Amo - I love you
    Siempre - Always
    Salud - Cheers

    Hope ya like it.


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    Salud

    Tonight you'll stagger in
    Through the cold night air
    To a bar thats void of friends
    And you will not find me there

    A silence will replace
    All the laughs that we once had
    And tonight you will pay
    For the saddest drink you'll ever have

    And I hope
    Tonight you'll think of me
    'Cause I will think of you
    Porque te amo
    Siempre
    Salud

    Just one ounce of loving you
    Top the glass off with salt
    A tablespoon of losing you
    Garnished with a broken heart

    Tonight you'll toast to you and me
    To days of smiles and cigarettes
    A toast to all the memories
    Of nights of love and no regrets

    And I know
    Soon you'll find a way
    And you'll find someone new
    Pero te amo
    Siempre
    Salud

    ...Pero te amo
    Siempre
    Salud




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      very bittersweet... this is a beautiful love poem, my friend. "..Tonight You Will Pay/For The Saddest Drink You'll Ever Have.." so very very melancholy. my favorite part:

    Just One Ounce Of Loving You
    Top The Glass Off With Salt
    A Tablespoon Of Losing You
    Garnished With A Broken Heart

    my only issue is with all the capitals. i think it would read smoother and be more effective without all the caps.

    ~Shalom
    | Posted on 2005-01-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I got shivers. I recently lost my fiance to the army (she couldn't handle me being away). Your words encapsulate the feelings that have haunted me since. I wish that I had a guitar in my lap right now, I want to put it music!
    | Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
      And I Hope
    Tonight You'll Think Of Me
    'Cause I Will Think Of You
    Porque Te Amo
    Siempre
    Salud

    Just One Ounce Of Loving You
    Top The Glass Off With Salt
    A Tablespoon Of Losing You
    Garnished With A Broken Heart

    me gusto mucho...por favor dime, more...I really enjoyed these stanzas because I could see them in my head...and I hope to see more of your work...I enjoyed this very much
    Gracias
    | Posted on 2004-09-26 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      ...Pero Te Amo
    Siempre
    what is it that?

    I think it is the best poem I have read tonight. that is my thought keep writting.
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by slybee22 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write. Painted a picture in my head. Sad but reminiscesant vibe, love the rhyme scheme and structure. Nice write once again.

    LK
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]


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