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This evening I took a walk. As I walked, I thought. As I thought, I strayed. As I strayed, I tripped. WHOMP! This evening I limped home. As I limped, I saw. As I saw, I followed. As I followed, I got lost. Hmmmmmm... This evening I returned. As I returned, I reminisced. As I reminisced, I considered. As I considered, I smiled. |
Surprisingly effective this piece. You did work a smaile out of me too, which was great as it's been a [censored]ty day. The format for this is way cool. For the last part maybe if you just said, "considering...' using the ing for all those words...then it might flow better. take or toss. Cool poem ![]() | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ] | Simple sweet and cute ok so whod you steal this one from eh?!?!? | ![]() | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ] | I liked this too. It put a smile on my face (despite the myth floating around here that I never smile or laugh). The repetition and the onomatopoeia are effective. You're a clever one. | ![]() | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ] | |