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    dots Submission Name: The sight of herselfdots
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    Author: lost_escape
    ASL Info:    16/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 44/60/23
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 339
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    Bytes: 852



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    dotsThe sight of herselfdots
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    Left alone in the cold
    No one seemed to care
    And to her it all seemed
    Completely unfair.
    She looked all around,
    All faces appear lost.
    She’s lost all hope
    At a much deeper cost.
    She looks right through me
    I care, I’m here.
    But she just doesn’t notice
    She’s too full of fear.
    She’s afraid of forgiveness
    Afraid of sadness
    But her anger takes over,
    And she’s filled with madness.
    She wants respect,
    And love of course
    I try to give it,
    But I'm not the right source.
    She wants it from mom,
    She wants it from dad.
    I guess when they look at her,
    All they see is bad.
    She is a great person,
    I want them too understand
    That her love is pure,
    Like an unfounded land.




    Submitted on 2004-09-23 21:27:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked the message behind this one because its someone looking for love from the right people. But the person doesn't realize they are risking losing the love they already have. Its an interesting thought.
    | Posted on 2004-09-26 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the message you bring about your poem here. Good rhyme scheme although it could be perfected a little more. I can relate to what you write, and it's of great help to know there's people like you and me that express true feelings and a vivid reality. Keep up the good work.

    LK
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]
      That poem is so close to me, because that's just how I feel and my best friends as well. Why can't they just understand? They just need to shut their damn mouths sometimes, because it's life, and things don't go perfect, and they don't always go as planed, and they need to cut the [censored], and get over themselves.

    ^MOnkey
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Monkey | [ Reply to This ]
      Everyone always wants everything to be so perfect. And it's not. And then they complain about what they have created for themselves.
    This poem reminds me of the people that end up taking all the crap from those mentioned above. I like it a lot. Very down to the point, but long enough to be interesting. Quite nice!
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by Scribbles1338 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this piece..the message is nice and you delivered it well withno confusions..there are a few lines that needs polishing...the 6th and 11th lines. thanks for sharing this one.. interesting message..
    meh,
    jen
    | Posted on 2004-09-23 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]



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