Sign up to EliteSkills

Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

sad eyes

Author: Scribbles1338
ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169 /167 /37
Words: 112
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
Total Views: 1427
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 895


...We often forget that there's always someone watching...

sad eyes

Sad eyes twinkle
Sparkle like the sun
Reflections of our souls
Reflections of our dreams
Can you see the tears
And can you feel the pain
Which dulls my eyes with sorrow
Which dulls my eyes with strain
A distant glance
Follows my every move
Sad eyes looking
Sad eyes smiling
Twinkling like the sun
These tears also twinkle
These tears also speak
These tears make me wonder
What has made me so weak
Sad eyes looking
They twinkle with surprise
Sad eyes looking
Seeing lies
Everything is scrutinized
It's much too hard to feel
Twinkling eyes
Make everything surreal
Sad eyes twinkle
Like the sparkling sun

Submitted on 2004-09-23 23:32:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!


  nice, associating sadness with twinkling....... Ilike the flow, I think it would be better with some punctuation,,,, but that's me I have thing about it...... looking forward to reading more of your stuff
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?