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    dots Submission Name: sad eyesdots

    Author: Scribbles1338
    ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169/167/37
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Sad eyes twinkle
    Sparkle like the sun
    Reflections of our souls
    Reflections of our dreams
    Can you see the tears
    And can you feel the pain
    Which dulls my eyes with sorrow
    Which dulls my eyes with strain
    A distant glance
    Follows my every move
    Sad eyes looking
    Sad eyes smiling
    Twinkling like the sun
    These tears also twinkle
    These tears also speak
    These tears make me wonder
    What has made me so weak
    Sad eyes looking
    They twinkle with surprise
    Sad eyes looking
    Seeing lies
    Everything is scrutinized
    It's much too hard to feel
    Twinkling eyes
    Make everything surreal
    Sad eyes twinkle
    Like the sparkling sun

    Submitted on 2004-09-23 23:32:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice, associating sadness with twinkling....... Ilike the flow, I think it would be better with some punctuation,,,, but that's me I have thing about it...... looking forward to reading more of your stuff
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

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