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cursed dreams


Author: Scribbles1338
ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169 /167 /37
Words: 150
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I am haunted by my past...but perhaps one day will come when I will forget it all...unlikely, but it's worth a shot.


cursed dreams



Sleepless nights
As if in constant repetition of the memories
They have abandoned me forever
Were they ever there?
I remember the carefree days
The time when the simplicity of life evaded me
The cold, harsh words,
Whispered longingly into the night
Blinding pain
My past is all there
Seen hanging from a noose,
Ghostlike images that will haunt me forever
I remember you
Your words left me cold and undaunted
Until the memories set in
And my pain did not recede
I was trapped in a state of perplexity
Unaware of my right to live
Free from your prison
It is different now
You’re forever gone
And the memories of you shall soon fade
Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion
My heart must sleep once more
Has it ever slept?
I do not remember…
But I drift off
Into a blissful slumber






Submitted on 2004-09-23 23:39:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Tis an awsome poem! I think a lot of people can relate to this, including me definatly, but we all have to get over it. Like it says "And the memories of you shall soon fade
Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion"
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by Marbles | [ Reply to This ]
  i read it for so many times and i think it's great...well-written..the message is portayed well...i can relate to the idea...nothing more to say...thanks for sharing.
meh,
jen
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
  Some really great imagery - I liked
"My past is all there
Seen hanging from a noose,"
and
"And the memories of you shall soon fade
Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion
My heart must sleep once more
Has it ever slept?"

I did wonder about
"Were they ever there?
I remember the carefree days
The time when the simplicity of life evaded me
The cold, harsh words,"
You start out wondering if they happened, then you say you remember good days, but go on to describe painful ones - the abrupt chnages in tone got me there.

Good job of not sinking into the pain enough to be unable to think creatively. You did a good job of getting my empathy without boring me - can be hard to do. You kept it fresh, adn I definitely identify.

~ Niphredil
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]


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