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    dots Submission Name: cursed dreamsdots
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    Author: Scribbles1338
    ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169/167/37
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1149
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    Description:
       I am haunted by my past...but perhaps one day will come when I will forget it all...unlikely, but it's worth a shot.


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    dotscursed dreamsdots
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    Sleepless nights
    As if in constant repetition of the memories
    They have abandoned me forever
    Were they ever there?
    I remember the carefree days
    The time when the simplicity of life evaded me
    The cold, harsh words,
    Whispered longingly into the night
    Blinding pain
    My past is all there
    Seen hanging from a noose,
    Ghostlike images that will haunt me forever
    I remember you
    Your words left me cold and undaunted
    Until the memories set in
    And my pain did not recede
    I was trapped in a state of perplexity
    Unaware of my right to live
    Free from your prison
    It is different now
    You’re forever gone
    And the memories of you shall soon fade
    Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion
    My heart must sleep once more
    Has it ever slept?
    I do not remember…
    But I drift off
    Into a blissful slumber






    Submitted on 2004-09-23 23:39:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tis an awsome poem! I think a lot of people can relate to this, including me definatly, but we all have to get over it. Like it says "And the memories of you shall soon fade
    Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion"
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by Marbles | [ Reply to This ]
      i read it for so many times and i think it's great...well-written..the message is portayed well...i can relate to the idea...nothing more to say...thanks for sharing.
    meh,
    jen
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      Some really great imagery - I liked
    "My past is all there
    Seen hanging from a noose,"
    and
    "And the memories of you shall soon fade
    Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion
    My heart must sleep once more
    Has it ever slept?"

    I did wonder about
    "Were they ever there?
    I remember the carefree days
    The time when the simplicity of life evaded me
    The cold, harsh words,"
    You start out wondering if they happened, then you say you remember good days, but go on to describe painful ones - the abrupt chnages in tone got me there.

    Good job of not sinking into the pain enough to be unable to think creatively. You did a good job of getting my empathy without boring me - can be hard to do. You kept it fresh, adn I definitely identify.

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]


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