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Sleepless nights As if in constant repetition of the memories They have abandoned me forever Were they ever there? I remember the carefree days The time when the simplicity of life evaded me The cold, harsh words, Whispered longingly into the night Blinding pain My past is all there Seen hanging from a noose, Ghostlike images that will haunt me forever I remember you Your words left me cold and undaunted Until the memories set in And my pain did not recede I was trapped in a state of perplexity Unaware of my right to live Free from your prison It is different now You’re forever gone And the memories of you shall soon fade Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion My heart must sleep once more Has it ever slept? I do not remember… But I drift off Into a blissful slumber |
Tis an awsome poem! I think a lot of people can relate to this, including me definatly, but we all have to get over it. Like it says "And the memories of you shall soon fade Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion" | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by Marbles | [ Reply to This ] | i read it for so many times and i think it's great...well-written..the message is portayed well...i can relate to the idea...nothing more to say...thanks for sharing. | meh, jen | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ] | Some really great imagery - I liked | "My past is all there Seen hanging from a noose," and "And the memories of you shall soon fade Like a ship slowly sailing into oblivion My heart must sleep once more Has it ever slept?" I did wonder about "Were they ever there? I remember the carefree days The time when the simplicity of life evaded me The cold, harsh words," You start out wondering if they happened, then you say you remember good days, but go on to describe painful ones - the abrupt chnages in tone got me there. Good job of not sinking into the pain enough to be unable to think creatively. You did a good job of getting my empathy without boring me - can be hard to do. You kept it fresh, adn I definitely identify. ~ Niphredil | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ] | |