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    dots Submission Name: Death or Beauty?dots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This was inspired by the feminist literature I've been reading lately and Torie's piece "Feeling Meaning."

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    dotsDeath or Beauty?dots

    Dying must be beautiful:
    starving can kill you,
    but you want me twig thin.
    The sun causes cancer,
    but you want me tan.
    The sun causes wrinkles,
    but you want me smooth,
    but after I burn my skin
    with a laser,
    rearrange my teeth
    inside my head,
    put water balloons
    in my chest,
    shards of plastic
    in my eyes,
    vacuum out so much fat
    that I can't menstruate.
    Will I be beautiful?
    Or will I die?
    Why can't you see
    The beauty I already have?
    Maybe you have the problem,
    and not me.

    Submitted on 2004-02-28 21:38:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good. Of course, this has an amazing message. God, I just wish everyone would stop obsessing over the physical aspects of everyone and concentrate on things you can't always see, but can feel. Like our poetry.
    I really liked this, but I didn't really like the ending. I think everything flowed smoothly...and then just stopped. But I don't want you to change anything because it's your poem, not mine.
    | Posted on 2004-10-07 00:00:00 | by Kalidoscopeeyes | [ Reply to This ]
      As a recovering bulimic and former anorexic, I, too applaud the message in this piece. My focus now is more on trying to help others overcome their eating disorders and to value themselves for who they are.

    (and wouldn't you think someone would check and make sure before they chided someone on misspelling a word? *L*)
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      'k first of all, Adam, buddy, leave the spelling critique to cuddle, she's much better at it. I love this piece! It reminds me of all the times I've been laughed at for my curves, sneered at for my pale skin. Well, guess what,y'all? I'm pale because I protect my skin. I'm big because God made me that way. AND I"M PROUD OF IT!!!! Well written, amy, well written indeed.<><
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      what a wonderful way, to express, to someone, to accept you for being you. i liked the title and the beauty in the meaning of your poem.
    | Posted on 2004-03-08 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      hey girls out there->i like this poem a lot. it makes me sad but i have been struggling/living with anorexia for the past 6 yrs. and i know what this really means!!! im still dying and i don't even think im beautiful, so you have an excellent point..i think its really cool of you to put these thoughts out there when so many more of us think the same thing and are used to being ignored by society! they say thin is out, but even Drew Barrymore, the once-posterchild for being a proud curvy woman, is on magazine covers for the weight she's lost...its disgusting! thats it...i love it, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2004-02-29 00:00:00 | by leper messiah | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel anger in this poem, but everything you said is true..shouldnt it be if you feel you are beautiful then you are dammit. good write keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-02-29 00:00:00 | by TastemyTears | [ Reply to This ]
      you know, i read this and i think make-up witches on the subway. i think natural people getting on with their compacts of whale fat and applying liberally as needed. if YOU THINK YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL> THEN WHY/HOW IS THAT NOT ENOUGH?

    why do other people have to see you how you are? it's just you cuddle. it is just you.

    | Posted on 2004-02-29 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]
      God i love that. So true! and such a unique touch to it. Very nice work. Definately a fav.
    | Posted on 2004-02-28 00:00:00 | by Voodoo_Lounge | [ Reply to This ]
      menstruate is spelt correctly....its all about marketability,,,some strong messages [message] in here and a seriously feminist viewpoint is taken and pushed unto thr reader, this does stink a bit of manhating,,,,i feel that the problem does not rely solely on the man but the media....its good that you took a point of commentary and went through it, expanded it and this, for me, is far more effective than snipets,,,,
    you know whatever your stanpoint this raises serious questions of vanity and pressure and insecurity and this has to be commended for that......
    would love to know your definition of feminist as you see it, im genuinely interested,,,,i dont know what it is....
    are you so because of troubles with men?...you seem so bitter in your writing,,,,
    evocative piece....
    | Posted on 2004-02-28 00:00:00 | by on1eday.co.uk | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... strong message... very insightful... Im glad I accept Elecia for who she is, and so glad I found someone that doesnt want to make me a zombie or cosmetically turn me into her tall dark handsome knight in shining armor.... great write... one thing though?... this piece is long... are your fingers sore? hehehe
    | Posted on 2004-02-28 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]

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