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    dots Submission Name: Why?dots

    Author: codysangel
    ASL Info:    18/f/ky
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 29/38/12
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This was wrote just the other night when I was feeling upset about some stuff.....Just tell me what ya think about it

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    Why do they say I'm lucky?
    Losing my mom isn't lucky

    Why do they say I'm smart?
    Making bad grades isn't smart

    Why do they say I'm sweet?
    Pushing everyone away that loves me isn't sweet

    Why do they say I'm nice?
    Cussing people isn't really nice

    Why do they say I'm an angel?
    They must not know what I really do

    Why do they believe I'm pretty?
    Brown is dull not exciting and unattractive

    Why do they say I'm a child?
    I'm almost eighteen years old

    They see what they want to see
    A cover up, fake, or conartist is what I really am

    The real me is scared and buried deep
    Hidden from reality afraid of not being accepted

    If only I was courageous not at all afraid
    I would pull the real me out and blow the collected dust away

    Prepare myself and realize being accepted is nothing at all
    My life is mine and not anyone else's

    Being accepted doesn't really matter
    I'm here to have fun and impress no one but myself

    Submitted on 2004-09-24 10:03:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...that is all i can really say is wow. This was a wonder full well written poem. There is so much emotion. My favorite statement was...
    Being accepted doesn't really matter
    I'm here to have fun and impress no one but myself
    to bad eveyone couldn't be like that!!!
    much love to ya
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      you are courageous, with pen and paper you can be everything that you truly are inside, I loved this, the doubts, the knowledge of inner self, "the best tool in self help is a mirror, just look past the reflection" which you have done with this write, never feel inferior to the world and especially to your self, you go girl, nicely done...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-25 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this really describes me...its really good that you wrote a poem about you that is real with emotions...this helps tell poeple a little about you and your life...many poeple feel this way-its not uncommon and your not alone...its also good that you write about it b/c it helps to get it out...and its also a really good write...
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]
      the last two lines do fit how you were feeling in the rest of the poem other than that i like it.gotta go back to work now. hope to see more
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by 3TOMANY | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like it when people come to terms with what they want to do in life. In this you're saying that you only want to do things for yourself, which is nice, but the typical teenage approach to life in my opinion. I would say that you should push away the ones you love because you really miss them when they're gone. I know that better than anyone. I would also tell you to keep writing as you seem to have a lot to say!
    | Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]

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