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So Called "Believers"


Author: Marbles
ASL Info:    24/M/IN
Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 46 /70 /19
Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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So Called "Believers"



So called "believers"
Or maybe faithful followers
Doing as they’re told without asking question

These are not true believers
You must know in your heart that it's real
Not just following with out question
But asking many questions

So called “believers” have nothing real to live for
They go by without emotion
They’re just going through the motions

Don’t be a so called “believer”
Be a knower of the truth and the way
Don’t be afraid to ask questions
Might help and if not wont hurt anything




Submitted on 2004-09-24 14:46:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by LoisLane | [ Reply to This ]
  So called “believers” have nothing real to live for
They go by without emotion
They’re just going through the motions
- i especially like this part, especially the "irony" of believers having nothing to live for. i also like how this part seems to imply that those who live real lives have emptions and not just go through life without really feeling. i like this poem coz its about genuinely living. i also like how the poem is not too wordy. it just states what is needed, yet it still requires a deeper look for you to really comprehend it.
| Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by kayel | [ Reply to This ]
  this was good. the last two lines didnot flow like the rest of the body. other than that i liked it. and i see the point to the story also.
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by 3TOMANY | [ Reply to This ]
  Confusing.

Try to organize your thoughts more, and put them in a logical order. Go from there and tell me when your done.

-emo.
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
  Hm. You draw an important distinction I think. However you fail to unwrap the central connundrum: if you do and believe what somebody tells you is the truth without proof (and there can be none) than what distinguishes you as an independant knower from a faithful follower?
shard
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
  ROCK ON!
Ooh sorry... but the caps were actually needed. I got this piece, and really... I truly love you for writing it! Most people who are "Religious" are only religious because they are told its the right thing to do... they don't use their own brains and make their own opinions...
Way to go on showing that point!
Awesome write... expecting to see more from you.
-Alli
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
  right on. not to often a believer will cite false believers. leaves the question "is this specific to one religeon?" not that it actually matters. but, yes, i'm sick of false believers myself. the posuers make me look bad.
your piece was well put, though. to the point, not a lot of fiddling around. it has a fairly decent flow to it. and your rhymes don't seem too forced.
| Posted on 2004-09-24 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]


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