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The Monkey Song


Author: Zu
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this is a poem my friend wrote. and well she says i am monkey and the friend i kiss is my best mate, lol. she hasn't decided who the lover and mrs monkey is tho, and i hope she doesn't. knowing her she'll pick two more boys for the role.


The Monkey Song



Monkey see, Monkey do
Monkey darling loves you too
Monkey wants to climb a tree
But Monkey dear cannot breathe
Silly Monkey climbed that tree
Monkey nearly died for free
Then Monkey smiled and said
“This Monkey isn’t dead!”
Mr. Monkey fell off a cliff
And Mr. Monkey gave his friend a kiss
Monkey’s friend broke his nose
And Monkey stepped on his friend’s toes
Monkey’s lover came to stay
But Monkey made her go away
Monkey cried and cried all night
And then Monkey got into another fight
Mrs. Monkey came home late
And found Mr. Monkey in a state
She yelled at Monkey for a while
But Monkey left her when she whined




Submitted on 2004-09-25 13:32:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I got a good laugh out of this Monkey poem. Quite creative here! We all need this kind of poem once in awhile to start our day on a happy and cheerful note.
Thanks for sharing!
~Linda
| Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  lol that was really neat, original and funny! good poem! i loved the imagry also and how it almost sounds sad at a few places but then it is too funny to be sad.

Ashley
| Posted on 2006-02-14 00:00:00 | by star_on_fire22 | [ Reply to This ]
  I too really like this write, its a nice relief from serious poetry and it made me smile throughout.

Monkey&#8217;s friend broke his nose
And Monkey stepped on his friend&#8217;s toes

This is an excellent part in my view because it shows the clumsiness that people find humourous when watching mokey on the TV etc.

It really is a clever piece of work though the repetition of the word monkey made it harder to say as the poem went on, but thats just me.

James
| Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  that is the coolest thing ever! it kinda makes you realize that we are monkeys...in a way. we'll die for someone, fall out of a tree for someone, and risk our poor little noses for someone. we're silly. Good job. Your friend is creative.
| Posted on 2004-09-25 00:00:00 | by winged_writer_robyn | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so awesome, I love comic stuff, and this is really original. I have to say, I've read a few of your things already, and I really like how you don't just do one type of poem. You have your death-metal lyrics, your love poetry, and a comic poem about primates. Very nice. I'd say these monkeys seem to represent people pretty well, at least the people I know.
"Monkey’s lover came to stay
But Monkey made her go away
Monkey cried and cried all night
And then Monkey got into another fight"

Oh, the constant drama. And I also like how monkey left mrs. monkey at the end because she whined. Anyway, thanks for the comic relief amongst all the serious poetry out there, and thanks for commenting on my ABC poem that you added to your favorites. It was a tough thing to write, and I'm glad that you liked the result. Anyway, keep up the writing, and nice lyrics too, by the way
-Vanessa
| Posted on 2004-12-06 00:00:00 | by srcastic1 | [ Reply to This ]


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