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    Author: sug90
    ASL Info:    14/F/U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 69/93/34
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 297
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 773



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    My world spinning
    the chaos growing
    am I going down
    the right path?
    looking for the
    past in the future
    I never want to lose you
    though I don't know
    what good it will do
    trying not to weep
    but still showing
    I am weak
    Giving peels
    of what I keep
    inside
    the cracks in my wall
    are growing
    even without knowing
    what they reveal
    I move without
    thinking, without
    feeling
    I am drowning
    in my
    tears
    but refuse
    to seek help
    and so,
    I shy away
    hoping to break the
    bonds before
    I am gone
    and ease the
    pain
    I know will
    be coming




    Submitted on 2004-09-26 17:47:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey good poem,I usually like a few more words in each line but in this one it didn't bother me,it did at first but then when I kept going it was fine.The whole short line effect was good,as I was reading I felt momentum build up and the words flew by faster and faster and it reminded me of willy wonka,when they are on the boat and they start slow and gain momentum and get faster and faster,lol.I can't see anything that I would change.
    | Posted on 2004-09-26 00:00:00 | by ColdinSummer | [ Reply to This ]



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