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Submission Name: Dare dots

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Author:	Scribbles1338
ASL Info:	18/Female/St. Louis
Elite Ratio:	4.44 - 169/167/37
Words:	67

Class/Type:	Poetry/Satire
Total Views:	1237
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	418

Description:
Am I flying yet?

Dare

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Standing on the edge,
Daring the world
To push me
One step further.
I laugh life in the face!
Powerful,
I have learned
To take whatever I am given
By the world.
It had had once taunted me,
But I do not care any longer.
I am strong,
Daring the world
To push me,
Just to see if I can fly…

Submitted on 2004-09-26 23:34:03 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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You have a repeated word in "It had had once taunted me." I don't think you need the ellipsis at the end. This poem has a good message behind it. Maybe you could add some imagery.
| Posted on 2004-09-27 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
direct and severely passionate about the sense of power. i think you did well in trying to capture one of the most beautiful sides of a human being. i'm not gonna tell you how it should have been done because your work represents the similar tide of poetry... free and expressive. but i am gonna tell you that i like your poem even though i'm not a big fan of inspirational ones.
| Posted on 2004-09-27 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
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