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    dots Submission Name: Visiondots
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    Author: Ontlogicalamity
    ASL Info:    33/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 190/194/45
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Comedy
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    I think I'm gonna start a cult. Not now, but some day. We'll have a commune in the middle of the Catskills, and raise rabbits and goats. We would wake up every morning and do silly things for thirty minutes. It would be called the Silly Thing Ritual. And we'd have to make it original every day. And we couldn't use props. After that the senior monks would gather around a tree and sing fun songs, while the junior monks would make breakfast and such. But they would sing fun songs too, they'd just be singing them while doing other things. This is my vision. Who will follow me?




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      YAY! This is hilarious, it's going on my faves list. Only, "someday" is spelled with no space in between. Other than that, I love it! No complaints whatsoever!
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    | Posted on 2004-09-30 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      my first impression: crazy! nuts!

    this piece should be longer. I think if it was longer and you had expanded it more, and kept going, instead of stopping after just one paragraph, it would be a very cool and liberating piece of work.
    it was enjoyable to read, even as it is. cool.
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]
      I wont just praise how "awesome" your write is. Its a nice vision if it would work. But youd get slackers who dont know how to just loose and be silly. Or good pretenders who just want a group to be in. But its a grand Idea. either way, I might follow.
    | Posted on 2004-09-27 00:00:00 | by Leala | [ Reply to This ]
      friggin right im in! ill defintely be reading more of your stuff, and i love this write. Did it just come to you one day? I htink we all have thought about that sometimes anyways, awesome write.
    | Posted on 2004-09-27 00:00:00 | by Josh | [ Reply to This ]
      Communism works on paper...and in fairy tales once you find your true love you live happily ever after...
    ...Sorry Im in a cynical/ glass half empty mood
    | Posted on 2004-09-27 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]


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