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    dots Submission Name: Beautydots

    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Lovely ebony heart,
    for the burnt soul of hatred.
    Crimson blood no longer flows,
    through the black beauty,
    as she hangs motionless,
    over a pool of blood dripping,
    form her pale skin.
    So limp...
    why did this happen....
    someone so worth life...
    now lifeless, motionless...dead.

    Submitted on 2004-09-27 20:51:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My title is to be Ironic. It is because she lacks the beauty now that she is dead. Iguess if you can think of a better Title, tell me.
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      suicide makes me sad and i usually refrain from reading writes about it but yeah... this was pretty damn dark though i guess when taking into consideration the topic it cant be anything but... im kinda wondering where they beauty in the title fits into the content of the write though... was it sposed to be sarcasm or irony? or what?
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      it's got some great imagery interweaved between the lines... puts images in your head that most time people wouldn't be thinking about that. The flow also help with the clearness of the images!.. Great write!
    | Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa! Talk about dark and depressing! But in a good write sort of way. The title is ironic. Or maybe it's like that because the Beauty was lost by her being dead? ? i expected this to be happy beauty but boy was I wrong! :) Overall, nice job.
    | Posted on 2004-09-27 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]

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