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Author:	The Gadfly
ASL Info:	51/M/Moreno Valley, CA
Elite Ratio:	3.55 - 1035/1330/360
Words:	285

Class/Type:	Deep Thought/Misc
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I wrote this piece from a humanistic perspective. In other words, how can any human being begin to know what "being God" is all about, when we all have enough trouble just being human. No one except God knows what being "The Creator" entails.

Food for thought.

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If I were God...
the Creator of the Universe,
Lord of the Heavens,
the One responsible
for administering justice and mercy,
you would all be in big trouble.

If I were God...
you would be sent to hell immediately.
There would be no tolerance of selfishness,
the 'I-know-better-than-you' attitude,
that persistent 'what has God done for me lately?' whine,
and your 'try and stop me, God' foolishness.

If I were God...
I would not create you.
Why bother making anyone who could be ungrateful,
disobedient, wilful, scornful, mocking, and violent?
Who wants to give love, only to be rejected?.
Why give anyone the choice to believe or not?.

If I were God...
if I created someone to love me,
how would I feel if that person
did not care about me at all?
What if my creation rebelled against me?
What would I do then, if I were God?

If I were God...
How could I convince you to love me?
Showering you with gifts won't buy true love.
Forcing you against your will is unacceptable.
Threats and scare tactics seem a little harsh.
What does a Hallmark card from God look like anyway?

If I were God...
my expectations for you would be too high.
All of your complaining and pettiness
would drive me crazy for an eternity.
The temptation to call it quits
would probably spell doom for everyone.

I could never be God.
God is perfect and I am not.
God is holy. I'm a sinner.
I am nothing like God and nothing without Him.
Yes, there is a slight resemblance,
but I assure you, I had nothing to do with it.

The Gadfly

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  I absolutely loved this! I found it on someone else's 'favourites' list and decided to have a look. There's nothing I would change about it -I really like the pace and the flow, and every single line speaks truth to me. The line that really got me was "Why give anyone the choice to believe or not?" Powerful, powerful stuff.

P.S I believe
| Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Poetofsorts | [ Reply to This ]
  wow... while i knew that you wouldnt post a 'if i were god i would have a great car yadda yadda yadda' write i sure wasnt expecting this to be as black and white and in your face as this one is! but i just gotta say thatyouve got it in a nutshell... i mean seriously... if anyone other than god was god the world would be in BIG trouble... now satan THINKS hes god or could take god's place but he dont know NOTHING! but anyways... this is a very powerful write and the ending is amazing... i guess just bringing it back to what you are compared to god... a hallmark from god... thats a cool stanza, a cool line. and the last stanza...
'I am nothing like God and nothing without Him.
Yes, there is a slight resemblance,
but I assure you, I had nothing to do with it.'
fully wow... if i was god i dont think i would have created man in my image coz i would look down at them everyday and think "am i really that lame!?" LOL! anyways... another awesome write!
| Posted on 2004-10-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Thank God you are not God! We all would be in really big trouble (or nonexistent). I think you hit everything right on. If God were you, he would probably agree with you.
| Posted on 2004-10-02 00:00:00 | by ber | [ Reply to This ]
  This is going on my favorites list. . . I think about that every once and a while. . . all the literal crap that God has to put up with from us and how we're so ungrateful. . . if I was Him, yeah, everybody'd be in big trouble. Thank goodness I've not got that sort of responsibility. Good write!
-Secret
| Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! That was such an excellent poem. I agrre with you, no one can know what its like to be God because as you see very well put it, he's is holy and perfect, and we are sinners and far from perfect. You did a great job showing how an ordinary person would have a hard time being God because of all the foolish, petty, horrible, and sometimes completely insane things we do and say to each other and Him. Excellent stuff, I'm glad you said this because someone has to say it every now and then because people forget. Great job.
| Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by mavrrick | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmmm...if you were God (if there is such a thing) you would not have to convince someone to love you because you would be above the need to feel validated by the adoration of others...
| Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
  I knew you were too smart to write those strophes without an ending like the one you have here. I wasn't sure how you'd word it, but it was a good one. Kind of like, thank God I'm not God, eh?
Dave
| Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the end. That made me laugh. You bring up good points as to why man is not God (and shouldn't be)...Man ends up being too unbalanced and one sided. I really like how you ask what a Hallmark card from God looks like. I enjoy the form of this...starting the same way each time with "if I were God"...then growing steadily...building the case against yourself for the office of God. I think God doesn't put judgement on things...good and bad are the Ying and Yang of the Universe...we all need balance...and God is balance (to me).
| Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]
  oooh you got nerve and i LIKE it!!! any piece about God is a timebomb. which is funny, considering. so first of all, major props for confronting such a "sensitive" issue. isn't it horrible that people are so nervous about anything about God, but have no problem with profane or lewd content? i'm not preaching, but people's reaction to this have totally got me thinking. oh but i'm supposed to be commenting on the piece: okay ...
i honestly don't know if i would change anything ... let me look again ... oh yeah! there was. (there always is, if it's good enough to bother.)

the first four lines of the last stanza need some work. they are a bit too conversational in contrast to the preceding stanzas. you might want to see if you can make them match. i'm talking about rhythm, more than exact wording.
please don't change the last two lines b/c they rock!
| Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by perfect_apology | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm thankful you're not Him...lol. seriously, i think God made this world unfair so we may know what is fair..he made this world not so beautiful so we amy find true beauty...he made cruel men so we may seek love...we have to find out for ourselves what si left for us to seek..this one is a good piece...makes me ponder..no help with the grammar 'cause i'm bad at it...thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2004-09-28 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
  If I were God

If I were God I'd sometimes wonder why I bothered, and I'd like my worrshippers get along better with each other.

I really like the angle you took in this poem. It would actually be a brilliant idea for a stand alone website.
| Posted on 2004-12-02 00:00:00 | by Sanny | [ Reply to This ]

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